All Comments on 'My Girl Tea Ch. 01'

Too bad the story sucked!!!!!!!!!! It was written by a retarded baboon!!!!! Come to think of it, a retarded baboon would of did better!!!!!!! (And YES!!!! that was intentional bad grammar, to mock yours!!!!!)<p>I suggest you get an editor!!! or better, stop polluting the world with your shitty writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I dont think it was as bad as the other person posted but it could have been better. I think maybe if you wrote it like it was a memory or something it would have been better. In a way its almost like you were recalling something but trying to tell it as if it were happening now. No one should ever try to stop another's creative process now matter how much they dislike it. I say give it another shot and see how it goes.

It is doubtful that you even ever visited Brooklyn much less lived there. Your writing style is lacking describing yourself as half anything. Most people of color would say someone is 'High Yella' 'Mocha' 'Nutmeg' 'Honey-Brown' and so on... so I also doubt that you have any traces of melanine in your skin either. You have one thing in common with many so called interracial writers in Literotica you don't develope the characters of the non-white lovers. Practice, Practice, Practice. You do have potential though, and you can be happy that you arent as sad as that waste of ink Samuel X.