All Comments on 'My Little Sister Comes Out'

There was no build, it was just laid out with little opportunity for anticipation or imagination.

Keep writing though, I like your precision and use of grammar.

Good grammar is becoming rare but always appreciated.

I agree that the story was rushed.

Read Tall poppy for examples of well developed characters and involving stories.

You have talent; keep writing

Good story but no lead up to the fucking...

Great story, hate too much buildup to the action. Thanks!

Again a wonderful story of Mother and her daughters and the descriptions of everyone masturbating till they made each other cum had me cumming too.

Lovely and kinky. Would love to read that story to a bi girl on a phone chat.

getting right to the point was okay by me. I stroked my cock through the whole thing and came with Krista.