All Comments on 'My Master: Pain & Pleasure'

I’m definitely going to have to agree with the previous comment. You should have definitely been much more creative with her title. I mean even if you just would have called her “Slut” that would’ve been fine. It seemed as though you did have a good idea but it could have used more depth. Just keep working at it and it should be fine. This is a good story but it just needs more detail and more character development.

I thought it got annoying after a while when you kept calling her 'this slut'. Why not at least use her name next time?? Or at least bemore creative with the titles.