All Comments on 'My New Life as a Slave Ch. 01'

stupid plot.

I hope you keep going, lots of room to expand on this story. Ignore stupid comments. well done

An interesting start and I look forward to more!

Great story, and I look forward to more, but you need to edit before posting the next chapter.

My only wish is the first chapter would have been longer, but we can't have everything in the world, can we? Definitely 5 stars and definitely looking forward to many more chapters.

As for the Anonymous "check your spelling". There were only 3 minor spelling mistakes, one word usage mistake, no big deal. "I don't no about you but I'm starving.", should have been "I don't know about you... ".

Mr Anonymous? What you believe are mistakes, what you call for an editor, are not mistakes but the English version of spelling. Sorry, but before you start criticizing someone's work you should learn not all words are spelled the 'American' way.

There was nothing in this story that created a character that I cared about. It reminded me of reading a police report, "Just the facts." The premise was good but not developed well. Uncle James didn't suddenly change. There could have been hints over the years to indicate what was coming. I'd recommend a rewrite and an editor.

This was SO unrealistic that it ruined it for me. I enjoy a nonconsent/reluctance story as much as the next girl but in reality this poor girl would just wait til the right moment and cut this crazy asshole's throat.

Boo and hiss to you, sir!

The main one being why a rape story is in the incest section. Why did the brother leave? Why did the uncle go mental? Why does he think this is acceptable or that he will get away with it? You have no real set up for the jump from normal life to this madness. It would make more sense if you just wrote - one day my uncle put a dog collar on my neck- rather than spurious background. -- UK CYNIC

for your first story i think you did well. the story was good bit short but that will come with time. so i now want to read the next part of this story, dont let comments put you off. some people just love to put new writers down.

I just wonder if they ever have written a story them selves I very much doubt it.

And utterly devoid of any semblance of realism. This should not be here.

brilliant story love the writing . reading this was so very hot and horny.

i can see the next part getting even more erotic with the uncle.

both taken her to the edge of being that sex toy for him and a friend.

Sickening.

Can't wait until the slut gets raped over and over. Fucking myself with my rabbit as i move onto ch. 02

Crap

love the story wish it had a part two