by conanthe
When I thought you'd be a bit predictable you've gone and shifted things.
the change in Suzanne and lara is good, Dana Duke is an interest to see the developments there too.
Looking forward to the next chapter :), So keep them coming I am an avid reader now.
No orgasm for Lara during the whole day Saturday or Saturday night? Out of character for Robbie. I'm protective of her so please make it up to her.
Absolute love this series! One of the best on Literotica. Keep it up!
I'm dissapointed at how you just abandoned Melanie's character and had her drop out of college. I would think Robbie would have wanted to check up on her, isn't he sworn to make sure the women he seduces know he cared about them. Instead he seems to have just dropped Melanie and Janet when they became uncomfortable for him to deal with. Letting Melanie return to her abusive home isn't the solution for her.
This started out feeling like a stroke story, but the story has developed into something much richer and more compelling. Looking forward to seeing where it goes!
I am really disappointed with the way Melanie's thread was dropped. And Janet too for that matter. He should have returned to Melanie and tried sending signals showing her how rich and fulfilling a loving relationship would be. But instead you sent her packing back to an abusive home.
He was also a jerk to Janet. Their disagreement could have been better resolved.
He also seemed a little out of control unusually rough with Suzanne and Lara.
Your story so far has been amazing. Some may not like the fact that you dropped other characters. Me, I think you had to let them go to keep with the growing story, plus it made it seem more like the college experience. Keep at it!!!!!
... all those who are upset about Melanie - he did what he was asked to do, then he fixed it. How much more responsible would you expect him to be?
Janet doesn't deserve to appear again....
I have been enjoying your series very much but I must tell you to work on word choice. You have a tendency to use 10 cent words when a penny word would better suit the story. Also some of your word choices are completely wrong as in the definition of the word is not the image or idea you are trying to convey.
Other than that I say good job on creating a compelling story arc.
I'm totally loving your story, however with all the females in Robbie's life (especially in multi-partner sex) I would really appreciate some simple descriptives such as blonde, athletic or voluptuous, just to distinguished the girls involved.
Jason
Man, what's with you and your nipples? Frankly its getting irritating reading about your nipple play in every fucking chapter. Also stop with that 'its my duty' shit already, it wasn't funny the first time.
I have just started reading your stories. They follow closely to something's that have happened to my life, without the extra talent. But also some of my fantasies. I like how Robbie is more then just a penis and enjoys his nipples played with. And why can't you enjoy pleasing a women every way possible. I love how your stories are more then just a wank read and have a little more depth. Thank you and I'm looking forward to reading much more
I read the first 5 words of this chapter. My reaction follows.
"Wait, did he just?"
"Oh my God!"
"OH MY GOD!"
"OHMYGOD!!"
"THANK YOU!"
Thank you for that. It made my night.
Loving the story, but sometimes you overdo it. Like when he says "I hit the salad bar for lots of roughage; 4 kinds of lettuce, carrots, cabbage, sprouts, cucumbers, tomatoes, olives, chickpeas, and pecans, sunflower seeds, pumpkin seeds, and walnuts, with some feta cheese and oil and vinegar." There's no way a narrator would remember that much detail about what they ate in those circumstances, and it reads more like an ad for how good the salad bar is than a part of the story.
I love that you've brought their love for one another out early in this, it sets a good tone for such a lengthy story! Thank you!
Great story. But cops mostly don't use radar any more because of radar detectors. Lidar is their new king. Uses light waves. They have got me three times in 8 years with that. Luckily I know a good lawyer that can plead it down to a non moving offense. Legal in Missouri.