All Comments on 'My Sister Jackie Ch. 04'

one of the worst things you could do is to spoil a lovely, erotic story (of any genre) with multiple penises and vagina, etc.

an erotic story ought to stay that way: --- with a some sense of taboo, eroticism, preciousness, gentility, exclusiveness and not open to the outside and/or others, etc.

Reading this story, seeing these two lovers coming to the point of admitting that they have a special, long-term love for one another, is great. It will be interesting to hear John's reaction.

Hooterhunter

I really loved this story. I hated to see it end without a conclusion, but since it has been so long since you have posted anything else about it, I guess it has concluded...leaving us all kind of unfulfilled.

I loved reading your story. It was beautiful. Yes, I aggree with the previous comment, please, don't make it group sex. There's nothing like great love no matter who it's with. I'll glad I found all your chapters written at one time on yesterday. I could not have stood the wait. Sunshine in the Carolinas

why leave us hanging its a great story please finish it with different last names they could get married no one in his town knows her so they wouldn't know they were siblings

Maybe this is just me, but I feel that the word "erotic" is... well, unusual. Special. You use it A LOT, and that dilutes it. In a lot of cases, there are many other words you could use... her legs were sensuous, slender, lithe, supple, toned, smooth, curvaceous, sexy. Erotic also has a jarring rhythm and works best in places where you WANT to interrupt the rhythm - "erotic image" has a nice alliteration and feels definitively final, like the end of a sentence should be.

Also, it wouldn't hurt if you'd get someone to proofread and/or edit your stories. "Sheer" is how you'd describe excitement (or a see-through fabric). Shear is something scissors do.

That said, I've enjoyed your stories and I surely hope that you'll keep writing them.

Too much erotic for me, erotic tits,, erotic ass,, erotic mouth,, fuck what isnt erotic

Good luck, I will go find something that is not quite so erotic

This is the second time I have read this story. I stopped mid way through the chapter. I remembered the story and found it to depressing to continue. I found some aspects of my own life and could not continue. Thank you

I still love this story. I accept that it is not perfect but feel that is written from the heart. I'm not sure that I want it to end.