by RobMontague
Love your writing but I liked the original ending better. Just my opinion. But still really hot work...
I really liked the first ending but I liked this piece better because it didn't feel rushed. I'm looking forward to the next part!!
Ilike this one but i do hope u'll continue....its really frustrating to be left hanging like this
As always you create a story that sucks you in. I really liked this series but felt that this chapter and the other ending was just rushed to get it done. The story doesn't really seem finished- we don't know how Nick will respond to Spider's confessions (both- that he loves Nick, and he slept with Claudia). Overall it was good, I enjoyed the sex, the friendship and the story. Thanks
I read both 7 chapetes and this one sucked! Really??? Sleep with him after he told you he had sex with claudia?! I HATE spider! Spider stop being such a fucking duchbag and man the fuck up!
I don't understand why you wrote this chapter, unless you wanted to portray them both in a negative light (Nick = dim pushover, Jason = opportunistic ass) and their relationship as being based on sex. Because why else would Nick let Jason fuck him TWICE after that Claudia bombshell? You handled it much better the first time around. Trust your gut.
ok, this chapter wasn't as rushed but it still wasn't satisfactory. I think part of it is that there is very little background on Jason, such as why he's living with Casey and Josh instead of with his family. And why is Trevor so touchy-feely with Nile when he's supposed to be Leander's boyfriend? Jason's already been with Leander, so why is he questioning whether he's gay now? His sleeping with a girl makes no sense because while he's with Claudia and directly after that he makes no comment about not liking her. Her cheating on Nathan and him on Nick make no sense in the scheme of the story. If you were going to alternate the ending, at least make it a completely different one, such as Nick kicking him out and refusing to see him anymore.
The first one was more sensitive. The second one made Spider seem very insincere and made Nick seem ditzy. The only thing about the second one I liked was Nile's reaction. Also, in the first one, Spider and Nick let all their friends know they were together and that was nice.