All Comments on 'Not Exactly a Love Story'

Great job, even though she's young I admit she's a real looker.

The fuck scene is good, but the story is lacking in several ways.

The details in the beginning describing the inside of the coffee shop are unnecessary and drawn-out. The transition from "why don't we do something" to make-out scene was choppy. How did he get back to Taylor's room? You also left out some crucial clothing related details. You forgot to mention the part where the character slides aside her dress to get access to her nipples. Several times the character mentions that he is in Taylor's apartment, yet you mention going to Marc's dresser to get a condom.

The fuck scene is good for a quick whack though - thanks.

Should have fucked her in her ass. BTW, she's from West Reading, PA, she only lives in Tennessee.