All Comments on 'Off the Bus Ch. 01'

You're off to a good start. I can't wait to see how the relationship between these two develops. Please write more soon.

plz plzzzz dont leave it too long to write the next chapter, im dying here!! great beginning, cant wait to see where it leads

Cannt waite until you finish the next chapter.

I hope to read more with these two! Don't forget about Tara though, I want to know what is going to happen with her.

Will you also finish Tara's Liason? Loved that, and this one is off to a really good start.

I loved the story and was really getting into it and then---BAM! You left me hanging. How long must I wait to see what happened on the date? You know you are wrong for that!

I love reading your work, look foward to reading it and I hope you continue your story lines:) A lot of people, especially me, really enjoy WM/BF stories (even if we don't post our appreciation much). The fact that you enjoy the same type of stories yourself shows in your writing. Again, great job!

Great start, I think that this is going to be a good story.

There should be more stories like this one...can't wait to read more!

I love you!

Looking forward to the next chapter. Thank You. Ronnie W.

Your stories are awesome! I look forward to reading each new chapter.

Like ellora's cave or something. I've read A LOT of stuff on there that isn't half as good as your stuff. You should think about it, they pay you 37.5% of the cover price of your book!

so I know there's fire near...looking forward to the next chapter...Wild

And they are off to the races...

so stupid and unreal, but its entertaining so far. It's fiction so unreal is cool and sometimes I like a stupid story...

I'm thinking that the punk ass who keeps saying negative things about your stories is a serious hater with issues. It sounds like someone really jealous or

with their "nickers in a twist".

This isn't the forum for that passive aggressive b.s.

Why doesn't whoever the hell anonymous 12/10/11 is get over themselves?

Encourage NOT discourage!!!! Don't like the author or their style; then don't read their product.

reminds me of one of those British films in which nothing seems to be happening until the characters show how unconnected they are from each other and their world. I like it a lot -- five stars.

A great hook with a dream although all the writing books state that starting a story

with a dream is a no, no. However, in this case it works. The breakfast meeting with the fat guy was fun, especially his diet. The unexpected meeting at the bus stop was in keeping with Jolie's personality. David was a real cool dude and knew his effect on women. Her phone call was neat as she though she was doing it for a lark, but her dream won her over. Looking forward to chapter two.

What do they say; "living the dream"? Very well thought out and written start. I look forward to reading more. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memories?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.