All Comments on 'Once Bitten'

That's it? Oh and some warning about same sex intimacy would be appreciated.

Agree, it could have been written into a much longer story, but it was well done in this format. I am not a fan of Lesbian stories, but this really wasn't one of those relationships. Natasha needed affection and found it in Lisa, but once she and Trey got together she and Lisa became friends only and not lovers, although they were never really in that category. It really is not any different than a prior relationship with a man before she met Trey, but it does engender a reaction with many male readers looking for a straight romance story. I read the story as using Lisa as a device to wake up Natasha that she needed something more in her life, because she was not a happy person.

There's a pleasing directness to your style, saying a lot with a few words (a business writer trying creative writing?). Enonomizing like that puts a burden on your storytelling. You'll need well-planned and complex tales to tell.

makes me wonder if the story is not finished. is there a sequel

Ron