by al_Ussa
You should probably be more careful about language and word choices. The word 'skinny' has a negative connotation. Use of alternative words such as 'slender' or 'slim' is preferable.
Describe the girl's hair color as 'ebony,' instead of 'ebony colored.' Readers know the hair is not wood.
Don't listen to that guy, skinny doesn't have any negative meaning. Ridiculous!