All Comments on 'Photo Shoot'

Looks like the model wasn't the only one hitting the pipe! Please don't write while high - sentences and thoughts all over the place make it hard to keep up with the story. Completely took away from any eroticism.

Despite my initial misgivings with spelling, grammar, flow, and organizational problems your story achieved its intended goal, it was erotic. Please continue writing, but please make more of an effort to review, or have your story edited, before you submit it. Thanks for your effort, it was, in the end, an enjoyable story.