All Comments on 'Playing The Whore Ch. 01'

Its good and hot so far but you really need to finish it.

The quality and realism of your writing is superb, but you do need to finish the story. The build-up is great, but the tension must be resolved. If you want to carry some tension into the next chapter, then introduce some new issues or conflicts in the process of resolving the initial ones.

Finish the first encounter with the husband while introducing--or hinting at--what will come next. Your task as author is analogous to that of your protagonist, who must find successively more powerful ways to sustain the passion of her husband and to intensify their intimacy: Scheherezade.

This idea is well used but still good. You need to sort out a beta reader to clean up the spelling errors.