by storytyme
oh god this is hot!!!
Very, very arousing but why did you change to present tense. It seems a little awkward or contrived.
thought it was a lesbian story UGH men
..would have helped with this story. I found it a little odd how it changed tense part way through. Plus some grammatical quirks.
Great so far, would really like to know what happens next.
love it, cant wait for the next 10 chapters
YOU CAN NOT STOP NOW!