All Comments on 'Recreation at Lunch'

good premise, but it was hard to read with the characters referred to as "girl driver" and "other girl" it sounded more like you were telling a joke that writing a story. that being said, im going to mcdonalds for lunch tomorrow to look fir these girls!irl driver" and "other girl" it sounded more like you were telling a joke that writing a story. that being said, im going to mcdonalds for lunch tomorrow to look fir these girls!

For a one-page (and a short one page) vignette,

it did the job/told me the story.

Wasn't much there.

What was there was good.

So ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Paul in Oklahoma