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AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
This was hot.

This story is hot but could use some editing. There are some things that really detract from an otherwise good read. For example, you kind of flit back and forth between past and present tense. Also, you use the term "little nub" several times. It just seems to me that is a term that should be used only once or possibly twice.

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