All Comments on 'Right Over There'

PERRFFEECCTTTTT

I wanna try this!

You need to put some "finish" on this piece, like a good wine. Don't just end after the cumshot, add a taper-off at the end. It doesn't have to be long, a sentence or two just to round it out. It's like watching Star Wars and having the movie end abruptly right after the Death Star blows up.

Otherwise a good read. Keep writing!