All Comments on 'Sabella & Malcolm'

Great start. Please continue.

Probably should have waited to submit until you had more story to hook your readers. I know it's not easy, but try to connect with one of the volunteer editors. They should catch some of the minor technical errors whch detracted from the flow. A physical description of Sabella would have been nice. The dialog was pretty good.

great start! can't wait to see were you take it

She does not need an editor, the story is at it's beginning stages and looks to me like it's going to be a good one. I've read most of her published works and I've enjoyed eveyone of them. Instead of giving unnecessary ctitique to a story that has just been started maybe you should try and write one of your own.

it was a little short, but i hope to see more soon. and Solar Flare Metallic is a good color, though I'm definitely not a fan of Hummers.

Actually, I agree that a good editor would help, but I still gave you a 100, because I saw you're at 3.99, and that's too low. There's something intriguing about this story.

I like Sabella, she seems to be very determined to make her way. The fact that she brought the car that she always wanted and paid in cash is awesome. So I take it that she is a virgin and that is why her man left after 4 months. He did good to last that long. I laughed at the father and the brother attacking the boyfriend when she moved in with him. Where were her parents when she left GA?

Thanks for a great start to the story.

you must not read good literature, because every author needs an editor

I'm loving it so far.

love it

Great back story and start. I like it so far. well written.

Isn't UnfitandUgly on the inside. Thought you was banned bitch, so you had to use another name, to spew your venom. How cutesie.

Apologies to author, but this member is a piece of dog crap.

This person is an abusive stalker and cyber troll, his previous moniker "fitandtrim" is banned on this site.

Love this story