All Comments on 'Same Time Next Year'

but I think the guy was part wimp.

Trinna got her due, another great job by a great story teller, those naysayers have to many loose screws in the ability to read and think. Well done again and again

Shows a lot of work and imagination, good story line. I enjoyed it.Thanks.

So did you notice just how difficult it was to tell you that? Not very. The basic problem with the "I don't want to hear it" plot device is that it is so easy to get around by anybody who really wants to. I love your stories and I'm reading them as quickly as I can, but this one had trouble from the start.

Poor premis re Hesiod not know he was the father. DG created one low life skank whore wife who was still getting it on after she was caught. Great read.

Another genuflection marriage purposal? This is getting redundant.

This is a story that you totally controlled as is the reality of the situation. Trina and Zack were effectively demonized as their roles dictated including the convenience of their demise. The story was extremely well written and it had everything to effectively make its point. The author is a master storyteller and it was omnipresent in this rendition of his works. Thank you!

Him not know about his daughter with Mel made for a very weak story.

No question not finding out about his child is a real stretch as is the skank and her paramour getting the long walk off the short pier. However, think of a better way to set up the conflict between the skank and the ex-lover over family and the sick child. I liked it, I found it especially interesting the skank didn't un-skank after the transplant to keep the relationship from going down hill. I won't say its a super 5* but the story was interesting and different and the skanks got skunked to my satisfaction. So, bully for the author!!!

I read this story the first time a while back but never left a comment. I do recall my ambivalence from my first reading.

Of course this is a first rate story; a five all the way. I sensed the real parentage of Melissa's child immediately, but that was a plus in my book. I knew there were going to be questions about Trina's three, but that was well laid out by DGH. I was pretty certain Melissa and Andrew would reunite, and that was good. Though I was saddened by the fatal accident I had no compassion for Trina or Zack.

My one heartbreak was relates to Trina's two older children, the girls. They'd just lost their mother. They had no awareness of her infidelity. They moved from Trina to Melissa too fast. I couldn't help but feel somewhat sad at the wedding. There they all were at the church, at the wedding, all happy and cheerful, but somewhere, maybe even in that churchyard there was a grave, maybe a grey granite headstone, a headstone with Trina's name. She'd been bad. She'd been a bad wife. She'd done a terrible thing, but somewhere someone should have expressed some serious remorse, the kids should have felt more.

I think DGH needed an epilogue. I could see the newlyweds and the kids leaving the church right after the wedding. I could see them walking through the churchyard and placing flowers on Trina's grave. I could hear the oldest of her girls, "We miss you mommy. We'll always love you. We'll always remember you." I could see their dad standing silently by; proud of his kids, yes his kids, he needed no DNA proof.

. . . for me. I saw carvohi's name on the comments sidebar and that drew me to this story that I had also previously read. I like an all's well that ends with true love in the end so this is a no problem story for me except that the editing needs to step up one notch. My comment this morning is on transplants and organ donation, not bJs and car wrecks.

My daughter received two kidney transplants plus a spleen transplant. Although she went through medical hell her life was extended almost ten years. Donor matching is a complex process, many think it is simply blood type but there are at least half dozen other factors where most must match biologically for the organ to be accepted and function. There are two types of donors, cadaver such as the two dead in the car wreck as long as stud boy doesn't want to donate his penis for transplant, and live donor as was the example in this story. My daughter had both types. Her first kidney and the spleen of course came from a cadaver, an auto accident we were told after the fact. The second from a live donor but unrelated.

Her mother didn't match, does the story sound familiar, and even though I probably would my kidney doctor said no way since mine only function at sixty percent, no good at all. The man who donated his kidney was a Viet Nam veteran who had seen enough war in his youth so he donated his adult life to helping others. He and his wife live in the Rockies just west of Denver and they became our daughters second set of parents, again much as in the instant story.

The only mild detail I question about the story at all, and I do not have any experience with recovery from liver transplant donation surgery, is the extended length of time needed for recovery. The man who donated his kidney for our daughter was able to fly home to Denver less than a week after the surgery. I understand that all patients and procedures are different and there is also the author's need to fit details to a story so I will let this detail pass.

My only reason for posting this today is to say thanks to DG Hear for using the organ transplant vehicle in his story and raising an awareness issue. Check the box on your drivers license application next time and some parts of you may live on after your gone. Who knows, if you don't die in a car wreck with your pecker bit off maybe that's what will get transplanted.

Minor quibble - they kept saying it would be boring for spouses to have to sit through the meetings. I'm sure that there would be plenty for them to do while the wives were at the meetings, plus conferences usually schedule free time. It's obvious they don't want hubbies along!

I think it's PAINFULLY obvious that the kids aren't his! I wonder if she's gonna get pregnant after next conference even though he's been snipped.

I'm sorry, I can't share your sympathy for the wife. At first I thought she might have been speeding home to try to fix things, when I read that she was sucking him off I lost all sympathy. I WAS surprised at the apparent cause of the accident, thought maybe he was distracted, LOL!

I agree somewhat with the quick transition with the kids, but they had already been bonding since the transplant, so that probably sped things up.

This story was entertaining and well-written. I see some previous comments that pick at one issue or another, and I partially agree with some of the criticisms, but I have sat through enough creative writing classes and writing workshops to know that even the best writers can be criticized on some small details. If you wanted to write a longer story from this, you could expand on certain details, and drag out the transition for the kids changing mothers and fathers. For my taste, it was just the right length, and delved into such details far enough. Please keep writing and submitting your great stories. I give you five stars.

Very nicely written. Bit surprised kids forgotten their real mom so quickly. A thought crossed my mind that Mel had the two killed but impossible as she's so sweet.

Nevertheless, I applaud your writing style.

It was a liver transplant not a kidney transplant

he should have got the DNA testing done but kept secret. if one of his kids needed emergency surgery and they needed to know who the parents were it would be nice to have that information available right away.

the only sure way is R.I.P. TK U MLJ LV NV

once you get back the obvious flaw at the very beginning, this is a five star story. I knew immediately it was his baby. How could he not?

A very entertaining story. The author did mix up body organs in one place. It went from Liver transplant to Kidney transplant.

Perhaps it should be uplifting to see them together in the end, I just find it depressing that they wasted a decade of their best years through such a small error as throwing a single letter away, she couldn't know if he even received it, and if she loved him so much, she should have contacted his parents and told them that they were grandparents,

he would definitely have read a letter from them. Instead she married someone she didn't love and kept the parentage secret.

Ridiculous premises like this really annoys me. It ends well enough, though I can't imagine living in ignorance of his kids' real parentage.

A little different, and very well written. Thanks.

The good guy comes out on top 🤓. I saw an error but, it had no effect on the story as far as I'm concerned. More please can we have another:-).

First HOLE:

Melissa is in love with him, but does not think he deserves to know that she is having his child?

Four months pregnant and someone else has to tell him about it, because she won't?

She was writing to him regularly, so it is not like they were out of communication.

Second HOLE:

As mentioned by DWornock on 06/29/11:

Even in the extremely unlikely event he would not talk to or read a letter from the pregnant girl, it is not possible that a pregnant would not talk to her mother and other. It is not possible that he would have refused to talk to his commanding officer, or his mother, or his sister, or her mother all of whom would have told him he is the father of the pregnant girl and insist that he accept his responsiblity. And certainly the military would take a dim view of him attempting to get out of his responsibilities as a father.

All of that would have occured prior to her marriage.

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That he would go on for over ten years not knowing he was the father of Melissa's child is beyond plausibility.

It could be believed if Melissa had hated him and hid his daughter from him out of spite.

Awfully contrived and full of plotholes as others have mentioned

Married female former college instructor in Helena Montana is serial cheater. Would like you to write story based on facts about her sexual harassment induced affair with student

Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com has details

1) why would he contact chicago sheriff accident was in rural illinois?

2) there are no chicago sheriffs. Chicaco pd only.

3) 25 year age difference? Not plausible, she would have become a joke.

4) to get from chicago to anywhere in ohio, you would not take rural roads.

Story was average

It was only FANTASY, a work of PURE FICTION..and yet, it had a ring of truth in it. I liked it. So shoot me, or not.

Killing them off was disappointing. Honestly, it came across as weak. It could have been much more entertaining. Sorry just being honest.

In difference to some of your other readers, I really enjoyed your tale. Perhaps it is because I have known some people like those in your story. A rather gory tale with a fairy tale ending. Loved the children and Jen, the sister. Characters and plots were well defined and the story flowed. Thanks for sharing a story with a "happy" ending. BK

She had to die! The best thing for all envolved was for Trina and Zack to die. The kids did not have to live with divorced parents. The Senator did the best thing for all involved, she told Zack to stay away from Trina and handeled things the old fashioned way. Loved it!

plot services were performed by deus ex machina.

the role of alan alda was played by zach galifianakis.

the kid was his so they could have straightened things up in five minutes while he was abroad. i didn't finish first page. 1*

Truth time I don't know how I missed this story! What I can't understand is why the movie mob haven't approached you to turn this into a movie! I loved this Fantastic story! Thanks for sharing this Fantastic story with us! Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE. .

This is how it's done folks.

God the would be fun to sink a claw hammer into that bitches face weeeeeeee.

The sad truth is most fucking cunts and scumbags get away with it because they say it is wrong.

Christmas day watch daddy pull a rabbit from mommies skull......woops wrong trick.

Story lacked credibility! I think, even after he found out Mel was pregnant, in spite of how angry he was, he would have read her letter! OK, that's just me, but the thing that destroyed the credibility was after he called his wife at the hotel to inform her he knew about her affair and that Zack was there with her now and fucking her and he threatened to take the kids! His wife and her lover would have gone into panic mode knowing they would be exposed! Zack would most likely lose his gravy train and she could lose her kids! Regardless of how it went down, they were both very vulnerable at that point so when he hung up on her, she would have tried repeatedly to call him back! That failing she would have made a beeline for the airport! But no, you had to get in your last gasp of gratuitous sex HOURS after the phone call! She giving him a blowjob when the accident happened! It just doesn't wash! She would have been on her way home trying to figure out how to salvage the situation! Just not credible the way you wrote it!

That is wife is cheating on him? What a loser. Seriously who does he think he is helping by not letting him know. What an asshole friend he is.

But I read it through anyway. A Cinderella story for sure.

Several times he becomes suspicious of things she does but never follows up on them, until it's way past too late. You had Mel take the easy way out. At least she should have tried talking to Jen and his mother before marring Eric. No way Eric would have married Mel without her popping out some of his kids, especially over a ten year period. Was Eric just hanging around until Mel and her Baby's Daddy got back together? Talk about a wimp husband.

Just another half thought out story. Guess that's why it's free....

Not too many stories can break my hard, embittered heart. This one however is beautifully written and kinda made me cry a bit. In fact, I'm a bit envious of the guy- shit marriage, turned out the best. Would I wish my first wife had died instead of a divorce? I'd piss on her grave but she's still alive....

One he didn't tell his friend his wife cheated, two he didn't check the DNA. Sorry he needs to know that for health reasons. 3 stars.

first Zack is afraid from his wife and tried to hide his relation with Trina after being discovered first time, so how come after Andy told Trina that he is going to tell Zack's wife and they continued having sexual relation even in his car ?

Second how come that he knew that his wife is cheating and he did not travel to stop that betrayal

Typical obtuse wimp husband who doesnt want the lawsuit money.

I hate to you tell you Obtuse LW fans that most divorces are angry and vengeful.

They aint Fantasy Island.

Despite those that say he should have had the dna tests done what’s the point. He’s their father in every important way. Maybe he is not the bio dad but he’s dead as is the bio mom so it’s a moot point. I guess he could have sued for child support and alienation of affection, but there would have been a media feeding frenzy and the kids would have been hurt. He did get 400 grand for the kids and Melanie for him and no need for a divorce. Good deal if you ask me. Plus the kids will all grow up only knowing Mel as their mother and Trina will be long forgotten.

From the beginning of the story there was no marriage. When Mel came back into his life I figured he would eventually end up with her. I was sure he would find Trina out, divorce her and find out the kids weren't his. But since you decided it would be better to kill her. If he had done the DNA the kids would've been his anyway. There was no mystery in this story,it was all up front from the begining. Good story, but if you could have shortened it by four pages instead of trying to go over so many things it would have had a little bit of mystery to it and made it more exciting. The ending to this story was in the beginning all along.

While maybe problematic, I don't see how her husband cheating is a BIG problem for the Senator, it's not like SHE was having an affair.

I don't remember seeing it mentioned anywhere, but Trina calling him "Lover" and "Baby." I bet she used the same terms of endearment with Zack so that she wouldn't accidentally call hubby "Zack"!

One HUGE problem is when he calls her and confronts her and she seems SO concerned but in the "real" accident report she's giving ass-breath a blow-job and bites his dick off. Very conflicting! Reality says she's really flipped out because now her husband knows and everything could blow-up in both her and her lovers faces! She would immediately hed home to try to "smooth things over" with her husband, so, to me, that's when the story went off the rails!

You read the free story which is very good and complete. The Trina character was low down dirty woman and Zack was a stupid man child. They got the only thing that made everything good for the other good left behind.

Yes Mel wasn’t overly bright but she was written as a good soul, in the end she lived and got everything she wanted. Everyone else did nothing wrong and were rewarded. This story is nearly a fable (DE Hear fables) kill stupid people and let good people get rewarded.

Oh my God, I actually agree with Timriv.....what the hell?

Of all the cheating wives stories, this cheating bitch was the worst! Staying in a loveless marriage in which she refused to invest anything, while she lived only for her biennial tryst with her adulterous boy friend. A worse cold calculating whore cannot be conceived. She got off lightly, considering what would have been her fate, when friends and family came to know of her seven years of sustained infidelity. Good story. 5*s.

Only thing I disagree with is the DNA test. I would've insisted no matter what he has should know. some will say whats the point. the point is he should know the truth. both of them should incase a health issue is a concern.

Yikes! I agree with Timriv too!

Cheating wives foisting bastard children off on unsuspecting husband's really grinds my gears, but in this case Andy didn't have much choice. He loved those kids and if he found out he wasn't their father, it would wreck their relationship. At the same time, his evil cunt of a first wife and her asshole lover were both wormfood, so there was no one the kids could go to. He got trust funds set up for all four kids, so he wouldn't be out of pocket for college etc.

Incidentally, it didn't really matter if he had a sample of Zack's DNA. Andy just needed to test himself against the kids to check if he was the father.

The one thing I was curious about was why Trina hated Mel so much and was hoping that the kids were Zack's not Andy's. The way Maria said that implied that Trina knew the truth about Andy being Andrea's father, but it's never revealed how she could have known.

Too long for too little.

I have a son who calls another man "Daddy". I cannot explain the pain I feel from never hearing my son call me "Daddy". No word in the English language can compare.

He finds out that Mel had his daughter. Why would he not find out if Zack was the biological Father of any of his other three kids? If one or all of them are, he could have simply asked the Senator for money to cover their lives. A few million to someone like that is nothing. And the kids deserved to know at some point. What happens if they have a medical emergency and need something - even blood - and their Father is not a match? You played the story one way, then you wanted to play it another way. That ruined the entire story.

...I usually try to only read stories 2 or 3 pages long since I read them at work. Lol. I thought i would read this 6 page since it is from one of my favorite writers. 5 stars. Thanx!

Loklie

And that is what Andrew was. Zack knew. Trina and Maria both knew. The Senator knew. Probably some members of the Senator's staff knew. There is no way of knowing who else knew or suspected. Probably Barb knew it also.

Pity Trina got killed instead of having her cheating exposed to everyone.Also he should have told Bob about Maria as she was party to the cheating.

If the reporters weren't suspicious of some hanky panky they would have been after that tirade he cut loose with, should of left good enough alone. Also, a little over done with to many cliches. I will give it a four.

Bob should be told finds out later he has right to take it out on you

Other stories do DNA test for possible later med problems

Some use as plot device to catch cheaters

He might do later

What if something happens to him

He's an asshat from beginning to end. 5 stars for showing the fragile male ego.

You call him an asshat but give no reason. Because he thought his wife was cheating on him? SHE WAS for 7 years. She didn't love him and was secretly hoping that the 3 kids he was raising were from another man. And you want to call him an asshat? You, my friend, need professional help in removing your head from your ass.

WOW

That senator was a really vindictive bitch. She killed them bot almost right away. Andy was very lucky he didn't ask for too much, as if he'd gone greedy, he'd been "put down" too.

LOL, just kidding, just showing you can build a conspiratorial theory even in a fictional case

Don't understand why the 12/19 anonymous comment said he was an ass hat. Seems to me he took the only viable path. 5*

Maria got off lightly. But she was a bit player, so not much difference.

This is a well-written story that is a drastic change from the run of the mill LW stories. Good job and 5* from me.

Guy is totally an asshat. Never ever apologized for leaving her girlfriend stranded with a full belly and disappearing for 10 years. Good thing she's a pushover, only way they "relationship" can "work".

I didn't like any of the characters in this story. And there was no reward. I read these stories for mental masturbation; the unexpected car crash and his unrepentant attitude towards his ex gf robbed me my pleasure.

This is a very good story JUST AS IT IS. If you feel a need to dissect, try it in a science lab. Thank you for your story.

NO OTHER WORDS ARE NEEDED...

Liver or kidney transplant? Both are mentioned.

This was a very good story. Too bad that the new format hides the anon's date, which at least provides a means to respond to the often unwarranted complaining. The one calling the MC an asshat wouldn't know a good story if it bit them on the ass.

This is a great story however at what point did the partial liver transplant become a kidney transplant? Proofreading should have caught that mistake! Four stars ⭐️ for this one.

Good read. 5*

Not a sissy but a wimpy.

Helped his daughter with liver but other kids if they have problem? Oh Dad is not dad can't use his family side so who?!

Or easy dad is dad sister etc match.

Nobody likes truth live by lies. The Truth will set you free!

No lies are Best!!!

jtwheels

My question is did Jen give Mel a chance to tell her that it was Andy's child she was carrying, before writing to her brother? The letter Mel sent could have been in transit when Andy wrote his final letter to Mel. Had Jen given Mel a chance to be heard, even after Andy broke it off with Mel, she could have written her brother and tell her the child Mel was carrying was his.

Of course if this had happened, it would not have been the story DG wanted to write.

Thank-you for the good read.

Pasqual

Six pages and you can't come up with some way besides killing them off to out the cheaters? Then after his wife is killed in an accident with the husband of a state senator and he has to answer every phone call? And answer every question? Plus the fact that she was such a bitch throughout their marriage. This guy is frickin' clueless.

This one was without your usual twist. I kept waiting for it but it never came. Not to mention the fact there was ZERO justice or retribution for any of the cheaters or bad people. Death is not justice as those that die feel no pain for their transgressions. The slimy Senator kept being able to be slimy. The people in the Black SUV disappeared and even Marie got away free and clear of her cheating.

You would think having been cheated on the main character would have at least gotten word to his supposed friend Bob that Marie cheated on him. He could have used the Senator to help with that. He had her over a barrel and she would have done many things to help him especially outing another cheater. I have had a lot of experience dealing with slimy and bad people in power and it is ironic how they love to stick it to other bad or slimy people.

There were just too many holes and wtf scenarios in this story for my taste but the premise was good.

I'm glad the slimy scumbag dude was killed , he was the worst character in the story .

That being said , Trina got no punishment .

Death is not punishment , it's a cliche.

A 5 If you tested the kids, no matter the outcome. A 1 because you didn't.

A state senator would not get that much attention from the press.

OK, I give it a FIVE this time despite the flaws.

BUT, I give the clueless commenters a MINUS 1000, for saying the cheaters got NO punishment in death...

DO YOU NOT REALIZE that their deaths condemn them to HELL for a million time a million years?

DO YOU NOT REALIZE that their deaths condemn them to HELL for a million time a million years?

DO YOU NOT REALIZE hell was created to keep the weak minded in fear and check? Hate to beak it to you junior, once the lights go out, they go out, there is nothing more.

Glad I could help.

Story worked out well enough in the end.

A great story. But..... you don't get kids and how they deal with heavy shit. Look up Piaget. I Disconnected and didn't read after the kids were all super cool with a new mom the day after theirs died. You are an excellent writer but i lost it with that

Wow.... who'd have thought the BTB crew would think death ain't no punishment! Really? Try it. I'm sure it's pretty damn bad! Especially trapped in a car in a ravine off a lonely road, bleeding out.

Didn’t finish the story, it was just to long.

Very well written and coherent story with it very believable what story line.

He might want to figure out a way to make 2 simple sentences be joined one smoother line because otherwise it sounds like Ted and Sally ran and jumped all the by Sue and Ted smiled.

It sounds stilted and not how people talk in real life. As a writing issue that bothered me some but not enough to deny it and not enough to dig you and not give you the 5 stars you deserved.

Also the kids got over the grief of their mother's loss a little too fast as to be believable. Kids are resilient yes but not that resilient.

Offer a little unbelievable that the man would put up With such an obviously hateful and loveless wife if for several years without seriously considering divorce.

That could have been carried on as an internal dialog but really should have been included.

That's the religious aspects and in terms of including the story I'm really +/- it isn't You're meant to destroy line and this wasn't a theological discussion on sin.Frankly could care less if it wasn't included in the discussion.

A good story pardner.

Excellent weaving of the plot with enough suspense and ups and downs. The ending is great, especially with Jen expecting her first child and the kids all adopting one another so easily.

Solid 5*

BJ

I think it's funny that people think they have the right to comment when they didn't finish the story.

Ridiculous if you ask me.

Dar Dar Dar hate to break it to you junior, once the lights go out, they go out, there is nothing more.

😂🤣😂🤣 Sorry I couldn't help mimicking that idiot one sided douchebag commenter....

Jeez people, it's a F I C T I O N A L story.😝

Great story 4⭐

Off cause the kid's wasn't his that's why they were all born in the same week except Andrea who is his.

All is good that ends good

Good story, yes, having the DNA tested was going to be a mistake. Good ending.

Your word flow well and are convincing even with scenes to convenient to the plot. Yes you should know for medical reasons. People don't usually die conveniently.

This guy ended up well despite himself. Totally blowing off Mel and not letting her explain when he found out she was pregnant screwed him. I would have been a little suspicious when Trina was pregnant again at the same time as the first child. And Bob and him not going with the girls to their conference was just stupid...

Wow. All this could have been avoided if the MC had not gone Rambo when finding out his girlfriend was pregnant. He immediately assumed that Eric was the father? No DNA test or any corroboration. Just burn down Melissa. No communication. What a colossal jerk or moron.! Take your pick (or both).

Pathetic and unreal

Great story as usual well written well constructed and extremely entertaining.

Keeping secrets fro his buddy Bob is the same as condoning and assisting his slutwifes activities. It speaks of low morals o behalf of the author,an all too common situation in these pages. Score goes low for this and the stupidity of the mc. Weak effort.

I generally like this author's stories, but this one was a swing and big whiff. There were too many internal flaws to allow me to get into the story. As has been mentioned a number of times, hero never wonders if he just might be the father? Next, as a state Senator, Conroy is just a minor local politician. Nobody outside of her local bird cage liner gives a crap about her husband having an affair; in the Chicago Trib the story might get a couple of paragraphs on page 17. Nobody, but nobody, is going to be contacting the hero about this. Her "superiors" aren't going to have her husband killed over this, and in any case the only politicians who *aren't* her superiors are pretty much the dogcatcher and their assistant. It's a minor story at best, and NOBODY CARES.

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Worst, though, is the plea by Mel to not have hero check his children's DNA - after all, he's the one who has raised them, changed diapers, etc. He's their real father and the DNA doesn't matter!! This is true . . . but why doesn't Mel feel that same way regarding her former husband and daughter? Nah, former hubby is a good guy and all that, but never was considered by Mel as Andrea's father. I guess that make's Zack the real father to hero's three (lack of diaper changing and all that be damned) but conveniently he is dead. It's a cheap way out for the author.

Well written but as others have said there are a few problems and inconsistencies:

Would have liked to have known who the kids father was, medical, financial, emotional reasons.

While the antagonists died, it seems like they got off easy for a pair who betrayed their partners and their families for 7 years. And they never learned anything as they cheated after being caught.

I don't think the senator would have hurt her career by having a cheating spouse. In fact I think she would have got more sympathy.