All Comments on 'Sandy Loses Her Cherry'

Not descriptive or detailed enough. Saying "He played with her tits" is not enough. Describe what was in his mind before he did; describe what was in her mind before she let him. Describe how he went about it, and his reactions to the sensation(s), and her reaction(s) to the sensation(s), etc.

If you're trying to write about D-Day, saying "The allies landed successfully" doesn't tell much. It needs what came before, the planning, the need, the process, etc.

Do that and you'll get the reaction you're looking for.

As soon as I got to her unzipping him and finding an 11-inch cock I knew the story and author were losers.

Looking back is something we all do,unfortunately the writer wasnt able to carry it off...the girls dont talk like girls..large cock?..whats wrong with ordinary cock..from my experience and i have disvirgined 6 girls,girls are usually apprehensive...