All Comments on 'Santa Specials'

Bloody swizz - turning out to be carpet munchers.

The story started off as a normal one, with the main character as a male. However, it suddenly took a twist, as stories do, when I realised that the sex of the main character had not been explicitly stated. From then on, I tried to write it as if the character could be either, so that the story contained a surprise a few sentences from the end. It worked!! Thank you.

Agreed to both comments to much train lingo and you really could have spent more time on your main character I was also very confused about the sex of her until the end.

for some reason i thought she was a dude till 4 paragraphs from the end.

Way too much work gone into establishing that you know a bit of railway terminology. Otherwise, not a bad read.