All Comments on 'Saturday Evening'

Well-written, engaging. Your description of the woods at the beginning was very poetic. My only criticism would be perhaps stick with one voice as opposed to bouncing between past/present and active/passive voice. Good job!

it was excally as i would want it....

seriously, i would have loved being her... my mind and soul would have belonged to him....

please keep the wonderful stories cumming

like your stories alot.the men are tough,yet kind. the gal are totally lucky gals.totally hot fantasy stuff.

Good story overall, but it was way too short. I think you'd do well if you tried to make it a bit longer.

One where u'r not sure you should approve, or harden. Then a classic last line, and the crits die........ :-o **** :-D