All Comments on 'Saudi MILF & Black Scholar Ch. 13'

Loved it. 5stars. Please don't stop! This site needs more authors like you.

You have got to be kidding me !! a 1 page story has the name 'Tyrone Ferguson' repeated 11 times !? Such frequent use makes the reader disengage from the characters. How ever good your writing might be, you need to work on properly framing your works to attract the reader. I am not condemning you, just saying it needs more work and a lot of polishing.