All Comments on 'School for Lesbian Subs Ch. 04'

too many pseudo sound effects.... Whack, whack, whack, whack, whack, whack. ZAP zap ZAP zap ZAP zap ZAP zap Thats no way to write a story or allow the reader to understand, maybe you should try writing a comic book..

In contrast to the previous post, sometimes the written sound effects do have a place in a story. I can name a few excellent stories to back this up. Please keep writing this tale. I am sure that many of us would love to see where it all leads to.

Well, too bad this is probably going to be another unfinished story. It would be better if she did not like what was being done to her but the electric prod would be too much on a body in any condition. Her body would be in convulsions and would not be able to control any bodily functions. True, a fantasy story can get away with a lot of everything, however the more someone can seem to feel what is happening, the better for the character of the story.