by TimRamm
...could have used a bit of backstory before the fucking started. The fucking was over a little quickly as well. Still enjoyed it though. :)
Please read my posting on the forum in the Authors Hangout.
And thank you for taking the time to comment on this "story".
The story was full of spelling and grammer errors, adn the complete lack of detail really hurts the story. Try to focus more on details, such as how something is being done amd not just writing 'he shove it up her ass'. Dont be discourage though, writing takes practice. Keep at it, and it will come in time.
and into the realm of torture. The use of a heated curling iron to penetrate the female in order to force her into submission was truly vile. Am I missing something? What part of this story was erotic in the least? There was little to no character development, the barest hint of any sort of plot, and it seemed written mainly to introduce a particularly brutal form of female mistreatment.