by CinderLaw
I had to go back to part 1 & reread all of this story as I had forgoten the story.
excellent work, I like the fact there is a good plot line and the way the characters are developing, don't leave us hanging for another chapter for too long....please
IFELL IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY& CHARACTERS. I CAN"T GET ENOUGH OF THIS STORY. MORE CHAPTERS PLEASE!!!!!!!
and it's that way partly because the subject, organized crime, is always an attention grabber. But mostly it's because of the care you give to sketching your characters for your readers. It's not easy but the details of your story let us know, and sympathize with, members of a crime family, of all things. We care about them because you do, and it shows in the effort you've put into your story.
Sure, the grammar and syntax could maybe use a little nudge. But your story, and the way you tell it, are compelling. Thanks for sharing your imagination with us.
Definitively a different type of storyline than I have read here on Lit, well written and quite interesting. So far 5-stars.