All Comments on 'Sensuous Sensory Overload'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Without consideration or discussion?

She binds him to the bed and then uses him. I'm thinking that most men would have been in a near total state of panic. That no pleasure, let alone an erection would have been possible considering the scenario. When she was forced to release him, I'm thinking he beats the crap out of her and throws her out, permanently. Not a damn thing erotic or relaxing about this. She'd be lucky if he didn't kill her. Poorly thought out plotline, poorly delivered without enough back ground information to understand (or set the scene properly) their actions. And you really need either a good proof reader or an editor. All-in-all just terrible.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Pissed that I wasted my time

Less well thought out than a sophomore in-class writing assignment. "I hated it" and the one star rating is too generous.

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