All Comments on 'She Maid Me Do It'

Put it in the bin and don't write any more

The last comment was anonymous; my guess is whoever either wanted a quick story or isn't into romance. This is not an anonymous comment. I like the story thus far; the timing is perhaps a bit strained in points, (I'd have given her a couple months in his employ, perhaps noting he always ate alone and usually the same things, before offering to do dinner) but you have a plot, it advances nicely, and I would like to see part two!

Haters will hate. Don't listen to them!

I agree with the timing, I think that was an issue. Thank you for your writing I enjoyed your stories. I look forward to reading your future writings. I feel, that does not mean I am right, that there should have been more dialog when he walked in on her with the porn on. There should have been some bumbling or embarassed comments esp from her. I read the line "X-two blissful and sexless weeks later -X-" this is confusing. Blissful would not = sexless.... was that an error in typing otherwise were you tying to convey that the went on their merry way without considereing sex again??? Why would they not consider sex again, he broke out the anal on their first night/second time, does not make sense. Again this is just me. Then she is pregnant. Are this not adults, why was this not discussed. It makes them look like idiots or that she is a gold digger. He rushes to she is she is okay...to support or to abort??? You put so much time and sweat into this and yet I feel that you cut corners at the end and left your own characters hanging. Again I would read your future stories and hope that over time you develop in to a good writer. As of now I feel that this is a stronge story that re-written could be a great 7-10 page or 3 chapter romance/coupling. Even the jerk co-work could been more developed into the story with an evil or supportive twist. DO NOT SELL YOUR WRITING SHORT, don't just finish it just to get it done. Write for yourself first but remember that it is for others to enjoy. THANX

You got that far and could not end it , thats just bull.

That the ending is a CLEAR cliff hanger? That means there is going to be another fucking stories, you dipshits. Oh, and way to comment as Anons. Classy, real classy.

More!!!

Peter.