by BeautifulAmanda
She is a full blown disguesting slut, actually I don't care what you write about her, she is just nasty and sick, not erotic.
the story whenever you want, the sooner the better. no main character is ok, cheating, lieying. you wanna live there, so go. but this is definitly not erotic anymore
The dialogue could be better, word choice could be improved upon ("going to" , not "gonna", that kind of thing). Overall it's not bad, but with a little bit of polishing it could be much better.
I was hoping that her husband would find her out and pregnant by Danny before the story ended. You have a golden opportunity for more chapters to this hot story.
Amanda is cheating and getting cheated on, and she is upset ? Now why not just leave for Daniel and give them all more of what they want?