All Comments on 'Shower Sex'

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litereader54litereader54over 11 years ago
Good storyline

Good storyline. Very sexy. My friendly advice though is to take a writing class (or at least basic english grammar class). Many, many run on sentences with very minimal punctuation makes the story hard to read. A GOOD editor might help. Keep trying. You have a good start.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
"As I drive to work the image of you lying in bed ..."

With your ninth word you wrecked the story!!

Since I KNOW that I was NOT there, and DID NOT participate, there is zero possibility of any believability.

No believability = total waste of time both writing and reading.

Sorry, I'm out!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
excellent

Perfect blend of kinkiness and love making

thomas_deanthomas_dean10 months ago

Late for work

On his way to work, he decides to sneak back home for a rousting session in the shower. A sweet story.

Dr_James_Davies_DFDr_James_Davies_DF10 months ago

Time for romance

On his way to work he returns home to surprise her in the shower. Fun in the suds!

Dr_James_Davies_DFDr_James_Davies_DF10 months ago

Time Out

A few minutes to surprise your partner for a morning workout.

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