All Comments on 'Spritely Fellow Ch. 02'

Interesting story so far, I'm excited to read more, the worst part is having to wait for the next chapter

I put in a faulty format with the submission (horizontal lines are not okay) and began to wane away from my writing. I gave it to a few people to read in order to get some feedback to no avail. Just as im about to lose interest, this finally gets through and i find myself invigorated again. Is this what addiction feels like?

Again, please drop a comment for ANY suggestions or critiques. If you read something in another story and want to avoid it here (shitty plot device or stupid characters) SAY SOMETHING. Even if you think it is stupid, i am new to this so pretend im an idiot.

I didn't want to suggest anything cause I didn't want to ruin the world. Curious what will happen to the lad and who he'll meet. Heck curious when mom will learn the truth about her son.

can't wait to see where this is going. I hope the dad can convince the mom not to freak, but if she does its ok its your story do it the way you wont to

I absolutely love the story so far. It is really awesome and I seriously look foreward to more additions :)