All Comments on 'Step-Mum Love'

This is a really cute story. It sounds like this is only chapter 1, can I hope? I'd love to see were this is going.

I gave this a mark of 3 , not because it was bad , but because it was too rushed , no build up , one minute you dont really get on then in the next breath your having a talk about your sex life , and then low and behold , she appears at top of the stairs and asks you to lick her out , please do not think i,m bad mouthing your efforts ,i,m not but try to build it up with a storyline , explain how they got to be in that situation , spice it up a bit , i look forward to reading your next chapter

Not a bad story, though it did feel a little rushed. They go from not liking each other in one paragraph to them pretty much being BFF's in the next without any real explanation as to why.

Also, the build up is the key to stories like this. Incest is one of the ultimate taboo's, and it helps to sell the realism of the story by having one or both of the characters dealing with the inner turmoil of having this forbidden love that they want nothing more to express but know that they shouldn't because society says it's wrong, but eventually they give in to the love and passion they feel.

But don't let this discourage you. I hope you keep up writing and to one day see more stories from you.

what a bitch. She doesn't want a sweet virile young man. Just a suck ass lol.