All Comments on 'Studying with Kelly: Pt. 02 The Proposal'

The story is great, but the spelling errors are frequent enough to be distracting.

... your first language?

If so, I suggest you get yourself a GOOD Proof Reader and a GOOD Editor to help, and to advise you on story construction, spelling, grammar and punctuation.

The story was quite good, heading towards a 3*, but could have been much better, at least a 4*, without the numerous errors.

IMHO I think Kelly should hold off until the end of the project.

There's nothing like a good BJ!

And would love to see her using her tits more...

Thanks for writing.

FUCK the spelling and grammar keep writing

reminds me of high school and college so hot being in control and getting cock whenever u want it almost

Stan should stay as Kelly's fuck toy.

I made it through the 1st part, but stopped early in this part because of spelling and grammar errors. Editing is very badly needed.

I think she should give up the pussy for the next reward. For the final reward, it should be her virgin ass, or anything he wants (which should include her virgin ass)

She is PURE SEX! Keep the chapters cumming.

Nice concept, though story could be filled out more. The major problem is spelling, grammar, and in general editing. I wonder if you even read this as you write. or read before you post. You definitely need to read yourself and get an editor.... or at least a proofer.

Again nice concept... but my 8 year old grandson could edit better. (batter ?)