All Comments on 'Summer of Denial'

The descriptive writing was elegant, but it seemed like you were trying to cram a novel into a short story. The reader is bombarded by multiple characterizations non-stop at the beginning, so that it becomes a little tedious. It has a bit of a soap-opera quality to it, and the protagonist does too much musing, so much that the story bogs down under the weight of it. If the story were much longer, you could develop the characters and their respective neuroses at a more relaxed and natural pace, interspersed with some action. Having said that, you are clearly a more accomplished writer than most here at Lit.

the author fancies him/herself as Hemingway...but too many words muddle a sentence. The intent is there, but the execution is poor.

Others have said the same points. Too much and too many characters packed in a short story without time to develop the electricity between the main characters. Perhaps first person was not the best choice here.

You write better than most but too physical without enough eroticism.

It took a little bit to get into it, but it was intriguing.

But I just am not into gay erotica. Thanks for writing.