All Comments on 'Summer Storm Ch. 02'

Next chapter they switch partners, right?

My feeling this story would have been better if it was edited. I feel you have not used ; and : properly in this story, which was a distraction for me when reading the story. Also I feel you spend a lot of time telling the story instead of describing in order to engage the reader. A final point where editing would have helped, I have noticed a lot of run on sentences.

"Room," I'm an editor (in real life). The use of colons and semi-colons in this story might not be exactly the way I'D use them, but there's nothing incorrect about it. That is to say, I wouldn't take out my red pencil.

This second part of the story has been building up two times, the first time quick as the sexy conclusion of the first part then gradually from dull shopping for quilting, woodwork and fishing supply via more and more adventurous scenes in the changing room of a sexy clothes store to very excitingly getting naked in stages with three couples photographing till all couples are going at it in the presence of the others. We have been building up to some nice orgasms too, reading out the story for each other, masturbating together and not being able to leave it at that, so when the story was finished we finished each other.

Can't wait to see where this leads! Hoping for more description of the big sensative nipples love those

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I hope you enjoy(ed) them

Hello from Greece! love is great. Sex is Great! Sex is love. Great written story. There is much feeling in the story. No rush writting. It is very easy read.