All Comments on 'Surprise'

The story died just as soon as anal sex entered the mix. Damn why play around in the outhouse when a good play ground is so close.

I liked the story. You just need to write a bit more like an adult. There is something a bit juvenile about the way the sex is depicted.

But keep on writing!

That may be the best compliment a fifty eight year old grandfather could get! After nine children and twenty three grandchildren, still being able to write with the point of view of someone much younger is a wonderful thing to me. You've made my day!