by AlexanderMarlowe
One great adventure! Obviously a fantasy, it's highly unlikely that women would agree to this. It had a wonderful tease factor with excellent pacing. The narrative style suited the story well. I'd like to attend this game myself even though I'd be too old for it. Thank You!
One of the most creative tales I have ever read. Well paced, thoughtful and respectful. Could it really go much further without spoiling the 'almost-acceptable- behaviour' tone you have achieved? I'm not so sure about that.
Encore!
That was by far the best story I've read here. A part 2 with more waitresses and going further with the game would be awesome.
A tour de force. Well written- good exposition, introduction of conflict, evolution of tension and a sustained and particularly juicy climax. Looking forward to more.