All Comments on 'Swing Open, Swing Closed'

This author's wives cheat for the craziest reasons, in complete conflict with there character for many years. Sigh. 4 stars.

This is the problem with the author, he starts of writing the cheating wife as lovable and I really do believe that she loves her husband. But as usual if he's not set for a reconciliation story, the author change the wife's character to a complete 180° where we don't even hate her actions, infact in most the author's stories I don't really hate the cheating wife infact it's the douche of the husband we hate. The author body shame a lot of women in his stories and it's concerning. And as in most of the his stories the plot goes 1) mc finds out the wife cheated and wouldn't even talk or hear her side of stories, he just withdraw from her or runs away 2) he replaces her with an even more beautiful woman in a matter of months as opposed to loving his wife for 5 or 10 years. That's the gist of every story of this author

wish wanda wld get hers, i think the silly wabbit wld be better off killing wanda and herself. rk

Dude, you should read your own stories, Wanda turns into Joyce...good trick, you must be breathing too much exhaust from your Mustang, check it out, carbon monoxide will kill you.

To Anonymous, Joyce was married to Greg. Wanda was a woman that Joyce worked with. Elise was Wanda’s sister. Nobody changed into anybody else, that’s how they started the story and that’s how they finished it, maybe you should read something less challenging.

Are there really women around in America (or anywhere else) as Joyce, or many other female characters in these stories?

4 Stars as Greg's wife was almost as dumb as my ex . My Ex's best friend tuned her into the town Pump . She then told guys we had an open relationship . Then My asshole lawyer told Me to be nice to her or we might end up back in court . 5 Years later I told My Lawyer what I thought of him ... I was Smart enough to make sure their were no witness for Me

So disappointed in you, Stang. This was shaping up really well until on page two Joyce apparently became a completely different person to the one she was at the outset. Thoroughly confused, I had to re read several passages to figure out that the MC was no longer Joyce but the character who started out as Wanda was now called Joyce. It made my brain ache so I had to bale out.

Usually Stang’s women are STUPID but Greg has to be the dumbest piece of shit on Literotica. What an effing MORON. He didn’t see anything strange about marrying the sister of the whore that drugged him and destroyed his marriage. I sue Greg along with all the rest as part of a criminal conspiracy. Let them all do jail time.

Wanda would not survive.

Stupid is as stupid does great story

A történeted egy kissé eltúlzott! ilyen,ennyire hülye feleség nemigazán létezik,hogy ilyen könnyen átverés áldozata legyen! Már a legelején is gyenge érv volt a különélés indoklása,még csak nem is történt szex ,csak némi tapogatózás,de az is megszakadt a férj brutális támadása miatt! Egyáltalán nem életszerű ,főleg ott ahol 2 kicsi gyerek van!

Joyce is literally every woman .

Pretty good but Wanda did not get what she has coming to her. I'd suggest a baseball bat to break her back such that she never walks again. Next, sue Wanda, her husband and "the club" for conspiracy to break up her marriage.

Joyce should have told Greg that she WAS NOT involved with the drugging on the first date and that she WAS drugged when Wanda brought home the first guy.

While Joyce was a dumbs**t, I never saw any evidence that Greg really tried to change or resolve the situation.

mfj

I foresee Wanda having many, many, many “accidents” in her future.

I ended up feeling bad for the wife. She was at fault for not appreciating what she had, but then conned so thoroughly that it feels like she only deserves a small part of the blame for what happened. Of course, it was ultimately her decision and a bad one to try that first time to see if Greg wanted to swing, but she regretted it immediately and was honestly tricked into thinking that it would help her marriage (bizarre, but apparently true). Then she regretted it terribly when she saw how upset Greg got, but was once again conned into all the rest of it and it all snowballed from there. At no point did she actually seem like much of a cheater except in a simple black-and-white sense. I don't blame Greg for leaving her. He seems like a good guy in every way. Nevertheless, I don't feel at all like she deserved the outcome. And Wendy was just an evil bitch.

Joyce should get a shotgun and go fuck up Elise before she picked up the kids, then at the trial, say that it was payback for wanda's actions in breaking up her marriage to Greg to marry her sister to her husband. Or have a note/video detailing all of Wanda's actions sent to the papers/ TV stations, in addition to Wanda and her parents. Thus causing an appropriate level of pain to Wanda, her accomplices, and the parents / relatives in the loss of Elise, due to their manipulations and actions.

Yes Joyce was wrong in her actions, but shit should flow down hill to those (Wanda) that deserve it. Elise was not completely innocent, she should have asked about what happened, especially concerning the drugging party part, and realized her sister was in on the marriage destruction.

Quite a sad story. It's hard to imagine a wife that stupid, but I suppose they exist. If I knew I'd been drugged, I would go straight to the hospital, file a police report, and get a blood test. I think it's a greater betrayal than sex and a fast track to divorce.

something snapped in the wife alright, stupidity broke out and took over. That said, she needs to put wanda away for life, break her body , fuck up her looks maybe cripple her and then she can relax.

This one didn’t resonate very well. Too many stupid people in it. Just not a believable or enjoyable story. Thanks for your try.

I usually expect better from this author, but this one was too far over the top with the wife being THAT stupid.

Just remember the old saying: you flooze you lose

First why would she agree to anything after Wanda drugged her husband? No one in their right mind would have had anything to do with Wanda after that. Why would she agree to no visitation of her kids? The abandonment claim by hubby was complete bullshit if he refused to let her see her kids. Her lawyer would have fought that tooth and nail. Then she gets drugged by Wanda and raped, and still doesn't know what is going on? Not a chance in the world is anyone that fucking stupid. Last but certainly not least, after Wanda's big reveal she doesn't collect evidence and sue the fuck out of her? Nope, I'm sorry. There are to many unbelievable parts to this. And for my last question, why didn't she get a restraining order against Elise to stay away from the kids? That one would have actually made sense. Hell her lawyer should have suggested it.

I got 2 words for you Stangy......... Hellcat Challenger. LOL.

Who the Hell is Joyce?

SS6, I love your stories. There was a few places where you used the name Joyce instead of Wanda and that did hurt the story a little. Joyce's lawyer should have explained what she was allowed / not allowed to do during the separation and what the effects would be. What I don't understand is why Joyce didn't go off the deep end after Wanda explained it all at the wedding. Joyce lost it all, and most of it was due to Wanda's manipulation and her poor self esteem. Joyce needs to realize Greg and the children are gone, and she should do everything she can to PERMANENTLY mess up Wanda - i.e. crippling, maiming (cut / burn off her clitoris, or something equivalent), possible murder. What does she have to lose - nothing. She could bring a gun to work and empty the entire magazine. Time to plan and execute...

I dont understand all the hate Wanda gets all she did was pitch a commercial she just leave out the side effects.

Joyce was certainly stupid and kept compounding her mistakes but in the beginning she did love her husband and kids and may never have gone off the rails without Wanda. What happens to her? Greg certainly had legitimate reason for divorce but keeping her children from her, really? Once again, the greatest evil in this story is Wanda and she won, BS, one star

Így ez nem hihető a befejezés! Nincs olyan ember aki ebbe belenyugodna, mindent elveszíteni csak úgy hogy csendben elsétál !Ha örökké börtönben maradna akkor is végeznie kellett volna a manipuláló kurvával ,példát statuálva mindenki számára,mert már úgy is mindegy volt ,az élete véget ért,sz.rrá fordult!

Amazing how many stories wife feels unattractive etc when hubby tells her otherwise and uses that as excuse to cheat

I am sure it happens in reality

Warned by husband she no good but not only associated but believed

Not drugged beginning but when was didn't do anything about it at least file charges even if will be dismissed for lack of proof it will put them on radar

But overall good

WOW! Never saw that ending coming at all!! Very interesting story overall. Thanks

Why do people hate this story so much?

I've been spending a lot of my free time reading down the list of Stang's stories. This is one of a number of stories that I don't understand why people don't like it. I'm also reading down the comments and, to me, not a whole lot of them make sense.

Wanda's a bitch. I agree. Joyce should be after that ass for what she did. But as a realist, I can't ignore the fact that if Joyce had more faith in both herself and her marriage, Wanda couldn't have possibly been in a position to interfere. As Wanda pointed out, it was at Joyce's own admission that she felt the marriage had grown stagnant. However, at no point, at least during the story, did she decide to go to her husband and really communicate with him about all of that. So yeah sure, Wanda's a snake for slithering her way through. But Joyce was the one who left her an opening. So she really deserved what she got, though I do reiterate that Joyce should be after that ass.

I also see those comments about how the husband A) is a cuck; and/or B) should be ready and willing to divorce Elise once Wanda's machinations were discovered. My question to both is why. Granted, Joyce was played, but she still cheated and he divorced her. That doesn't sound like a cuckold to me. And as for Elise, I'm putting myself in the husband's shoes. Sure, my newfound sister in law was the reason my now ex-wife is my now ex-wife. And yes, I loved my now ex-wife to death. But as far as I know, my now ex-wife was neither A) raped, nor; B) coerced in any feasible way to do what she did to me. Persuaded perhaps, yes. But that's more of a question of will power and faith in the marriage than anything else, the latter of which she proved she had little of. I now have a woman that has faith in me, herself, and most importantly, our marriage. Why would I want to give that up because my newfound sister-in-law proved that my wife was actually not good for me?

Maybe people think that women (well, if we're being honest, that should be "<b>anybody</b>") can't possible be this selfish, asinine, and careless about other people in their lives like Joyce was. Well, I can tell you from personal experience, they can.

I loved the story!

5-stars!

<i>PS to StangStar</i>

Just a personal observation: if the story still rates over 4 out of 5 stars after it being published 8-1/2 years ago, then you should respectfully ignore the haters.

"<i>You're never going to please everyone, and if you do, there's something wrong.</i>"

<i>Joe Moe from Chicago</i>

Wife was raped and twisted into cheating to destroy her marriage but never mentioned anything to the police or her husband or even freaked out when told. this one is not believeable.

StangStar is one of my favorites, but this story is far down the list. Someone needs to get Wanda off the board.

Same shit, different day.

guess what he hates it! heheheheehehehehehehe He's such a fuck liar. This insane ass wipe reads every one of the LW and cuck stories he can find. They remind him of his dead ex wife the whore who fucked him over his entire marriage !

Wanda is one fucked up bitch!

Pretty bad story overall though.

or someone of similar intellect. I get your parody of the bored wife getting her just deserts, but this woman is just too stupid to care about. Thanks for trying.

Joyce was stupid but Wanda needed to die, horribly and painfully. Joyce should have killed her

The bitch needed help not to be set up and shot thru the grease. She was a really dumb broad without a lick of sense who got played. If this had been a guy every body would crying how the he was played not how bad he is. I hope they find themselves in her shoes some day.

OK, you wrote Joyce to be a selfish, self-absorbed, mindless moron who takes advise from the town slut. How about she finally wakes up when Wanda reveals herself outside the church and in a fit of rage, Joyce stabs her to death with a metal nail file.

Anon - obviously your just another slut/cheating wife or some tranny who is obviously related to that bt2 aka vassieassie (brain dead tranny). Get back on your meds!

Dude why the fuck do you treat your wives so bad? I know you write them as stupid as fuck but after they cheat and you fuck their lives up why do you continue to shit on them? Even assholes need redemption now and then. You just keep piling shit on them. I know these BTB motherfuckers want blood but FUCK THEM CUNTS! Show some compassion to your characters once and awhile. Damn!

open and shut have different interpetations, TK U MLJ LV NV

Well said, Anonymous 02/05/15, even though several words were misspelled.

As for me, I've noticed that many of StangStar's stories have incredibly stupid wives doing incredibly stupid things and then being incredibly dense about comprehending their impact on her marriage and befuddled when have such drastic consequences.

Also, each husband seems to be a Mustang owning Macho who, after learning of his wife's infidelity, motors down the block, finds a safe place to park and then reasons out why his wife having spent the last six and a half years stealthily sneaking out to be fucked to orgasmic oblivion by 59 other men (his two brothers and three cousins included) is somehow his own fault and, therefore, he deserves it.

Just please stop.

why, because, the plot worked. Anyone who has read these stories, and older married folks would know how time in a marriage changes people. Unfortunately, many of the readers haven't lived long enough to know how accurate this story could be. That old high school foot ball jock that now weighs 350 lbs. or the head cheer leader that looks like a barrel, They know.

Of course chapter 2 would be the revenge, or retribution on Wanda, I know I wouldn't settle for anything less.

@ Anonymous 02/05/15...LOL, I couldn't have put it better myself, agree completely!

Between Wanda, a evil, manipulating, lying, betraying, backstabbing slut/bitch; Joyce, a terminally selfish, stupid, myopic, self-possessed narcissistic moron; Elise, a clueless, naive, bimbo spacekadet; Greg, the classic wimp/cuck and the convoluted not to say totally contrived plot; lies 4 pages of wasted time and space!

I have no problem with Wanda. She was completely honest about who she is. She wasn't looking to screw a guy over, but instead looking out for her baby sister. If anything she should get an award for being sister of the year. Its not her fault that a housewife got bored and looked elsewhere.

Wanda.

cut out her tongue.

poke out her eyes.

bathe her in acid.

joyce.

lobotomy & a padded cell for life.

i fully understand that the Author is using his usual method of a 28lb hammer to crack open a fresh egg.

However , on this occassion the Manipulation is way too extreme & the Stupidity of the wife is beyond the pale.

i realise that All to Often the advice & help of

"so called friends" is utter rubbish & bs when applied

to marital problems or the discontent within a relationship.

and that the stupidty & braindead actions of those within the marriage / relationship often exasperate the situation , rather than solve the problems .... but with this story the Author has taken that to a level i have not seen before , and frankly the story is not enjoyable , or interesting .

in all honesty it's Car Crash Literature gone mad

xxxhugsxxx

well written & am sure it achieves the Authors intended aims.

ie. to enrage & disgust as many readers as possible

frankly this one should come with a public health warning attached to the top.

Do Not Read if you have

Heart problems

High Blood pressure

breathing dificulties

stress related medical conditions

anger management issues

..Wanda needs to die .

She lost her husband because she was stupid, but for her to get out of that, she must take revenge of the bitch that frame her, and the only possible is kill her in a hurtfull way...

Joyce needs to write a letter to her ex-husband and his new wife explaining what happened, then put a couple rounds into Wanda's head. I'd suggest a more complex revenge that doesn't involve her going to jail, but I don't think Joyce is bright enough to pull it off.

Why not beat the shit out of Wanda?

throwing her out of the house did not constitute abandonment.

she was not involved in drugging her husband

beside that the story was good and I enjoyed it including the outcome

At least twice it was claimed that she drugged Greg, but according to the story Wanda did it without her knowledge. Granted, Wanda wouldn't have backed her up, but she didn't even TRY to deny drugging him.

And as for the "abandonment", Greg wouldn't let her come home, so how can SHE be charged with abandonment?

In any case, Joyce should definitely fuck up Wanda, what does she have to lose at this point?

Well written of course, but terribly sad. This is a tale of an evil person taking advantage of a fool. A fool that is loved by her husband and her kids. The way these tales generally work is that the fool comes close to losing it all but wakes up to the truth before it is too late. When you let the tale go beyond the point of redemption, it becomes pure, awful tragedy. Forget about tagging these stories: "cheating" "revenge" "infidelity" - how about "tragedy" "comedy" "salvation". No offense, but I never want to read another story as sad as this one was. Life is too hard to sit down and read this stuff.

Thank you sir,for your efforts.You provide a medium for those like me who aren't into tv,movies,news etc.And by doing so,those like me can read,assimilate,enjoy,and get some time to reflect on our own lives.Keep up the good work,we NEED you!

If you do not know your subject matter DON'T WRITE ABOUT IT. You just come across like a fucking asshole!

marriage you gotta be in, it to win it.

Ignore the negative comments. Good Job.

tale could have gave the baby sitter, nanny , a little more of her views, feelings.

some women just don`t know when they have a good thing going on. the wife

said she was getting to much loving at home. why would she want to learn

how to get more? I know some women who want some strange stuff. and it

never ended good. read it twice, not bad

just read it again and it is perfect.

Actually the ex-wife did in fact request a seperation--not Greg!-- because Wanda convinced the brain dead moron that during the seperation she --the ex-wife-- could sample various dicks so she can bring all the new sexual things she learned to Greg. So the ex-wife did in fact abandoned her children; she didn't call them for the 4-5 months she was gone fucking up a storm, although Greg stated it would be best that she not see the children during the 5-month seperation; I don't know of any mother who'd agree to this, she happily agreed to give up her husband & two kids, just so she can fuck different men. She allowed others to manipulate her, she was a fucking puppet. I've read this story before & I still can't understand how a grown ass woman could be so dumb & so naive? She just kept getting dumber & dumber in every chapter, I found myself LMFAO at her stupidity. I didn't understand how she actually believed that fucking numerous men was going to make her marriage stronger --how the fuck does it do that?! It never once crossed her mine that Wanda was fucking with her mind, Wanda wasn't a relationship expert, Wanda was just another fucking slut. I can't understand how she didn't realize Wanda was pimping her out by bringing strange men home so her dumb ass could fuck them. The ex-wife is dumber than dirt, she said that the sex with the different men wasn't good; she didn't enjoy it--what the fuck did she expect him to say--" whew, that's a relief ! Since you didn't enjoy the sex, now we can go back to being a happy couple again!. It didn't matter that she didn't enjoy it--what mattered is that she did it , with numerous guys & I'm sure she fuck'd them bareback. She had opportunities to get her family back but she was too focused on trying to fix something that wasn't broken, if she wasn't feeling, sexy--she should've joined a fucking gym to help get rid of her ever widening ass, if she was feeling bored, bitch should've watched some tv. She fuck'd up that Friday night but the relationship could've been saved if she just gave him a few days & than went home to her family but instead she allowed Wanda to talk her into asking for a seperation , she kept calling Wanda her bestfriend, she obviously doesn't know the meaning of marriage, mother & bestfriend. If Wanda was really her friend she wouldn't of suggest she fucks around on her husband, Wanda didn't know Greg, Wanda didn't know anything about their life & family, only what the moron was complaining about. I think the ex-wife got what she deserved. I don't think Greg did anything wrong, he wasn't a jerk, he kept hoping that the dummy woud wake up, it's not Greg's fault that bitch has an I.Q of a rock.

Absolutely stupid. I'd give it a minus 5 if I could.

story you have written. Was the husband on stupid pills the whole time. He gets involved with this new girl and doesn't have a clue that she is Wanda the whore's sister. At least try to make it believable. Too bad you can't give a story a negative rating.

where is her bad ass revenge.this ex was manipulated used and abandoned.hubby was kind of a jerk.she was stupid for not getting her shit stragt until it was too late.and that video tapin best friend needs her ass kicked.thhe new bride needs to know the truth about her sister and how the ex was fucked over.needless to say dude keep up the good work im waitin on all the new stuff

She didn't 'abandon' the family. Her husband threw her out. She didn't ask for a seperation, he did. She didn't seek a divorce, he did.

She is responsible for all the post drug fucking she did (Rape anyone?).

The only large plothole that hasn't been filled in with assfault.

she was suck on stupid but when the husband found out the sister of his wife to be what the whore that got his x involved in this shit - it must have gotten him at least thinking. no to reuniting but she might not have been as bad as he thought.

still gvae u a 5 for entertainment.

LOL and the Anon's are always a fun read - not helpful but fun. As always SS thanks for your time and effort I liked this time too.

My turn to be roasted I guess -- I did not notice that anything I said after my first read suggested anything about the husband tolerating Joyce's behavior so cuckster? Weird! Joyce got lost - fucked up and deserves her fate no issue from me there.

The scheming and conscienceless behavior of Wanda is nothing normal to my experience for a decent person - so a called he a sociopath - elitist ? hardly a very popular device used on TV all the time these days so nothing intellectual about it heh. Actually knowing what it means might take more than some anon's bring to the table- I guess.

quote "for example The Tasering by the cops of the wife ... who is 5foot 1 inches tall wass absurd to the Nth degree."

I wish this was true. is is absurd, but apparently it happens.

As in all of these types of stories, the real bad guys get no punishment. Greg needs to learn the real story. It won't change enything a lot, but help Joyce have better relations with her children. SS06 finish the story, Please.

Jms1956

I realize that it's difficult to work hard on a story only to get niggling comments, but I feel it shows neglect, or just downright laziness, when things like getting your characters' names wrong or changed around happens and gets through to the final draft. The characters are, for me, what drives the story -- we want to know them, and want to know what happens to them -- and when Joyce starts narrating about Joyce when she really means Wanda it's more than a little distracting, and it kept breaking me out of the story.

Probably why they come here to rant - SS06 and I grew up appreciating the same sit-coms and for the same reasons. Archie Bunker was a bigot, so was George Jefferson, and while the humorless pukes decried there existence the people capable of understanding the humor laughed their asses off.

Keep pushing those boundaries: some people will get it, some never will.

RAAC is only outcome acceptable and only if it results in creampies for the hubby - SS06 hit a home run with this like he does with every story: humor

The mark of a pseudo-intellectual is the lack of a sense of humor; that is how to spot the norcals, tava-cucks, and other humorless medium IQ turds that think their uninformed and unperceptive comments are "special" on a site like this.

Holy crap, this is the most moronic category on a free erotic story site. Even if you were the "special snowflake" here that would only make you the tallest kid on the short bus. Not the smartest, just the tallest.

RAAC is only outcome acceptable and only if it results in creampies for the hubby - SS06 hit a home run with this like he does with every story: humor

The mark of a pseudo-intellectual is the lack of a sense of humor; that is how to spot the norcals, tava-cucks, and other humorless medium IQ turds that think their uninformed and unperceptive comments are "special" on a site like this.

Holy crap, this is the most moronic category on a free erotic story site. Even if you were the "special snowflake" here that would only make you the tallest kid on the short bus. Not the smartest, just the tallest.

RAAC is only outcome acceptable and only if it results in creampies for the hubby - SS06 hit a home run with this like he does with every story: humor

The mark of a pseudo-intellectual is the lack of a sense of humor; that is how to spot the norcals, tava-cucks, and other humorless medium IQ turds that think their uninformed and unperceptive comments are "special" on a site like this.

Holy crap, this is the most moronic category on a free erotic story site. Even if you were the "special snowflake" here that would only make you the tallest kid on the short bus. Not the smartest, just the tallest.

SOSC was one of your best stories I've read so far -- I gave it 5 stars. I disagree with the critic who opined that Greg's character was given short rations, so to speak. I think you described the parts of his personality necessary for the story with sufficient clarity. Praising his skill at punting or poker would not have improved the story.

The wife's a moron, the husband is just a normal fucking guy that loved his wife. Wanda is an asshole but she didn't make the wife fuck off or complain about her boring life. If her life was so boring why does she want it back. And Elise was a woman looking for that life that his wife gave up. Wanda saw how much joyce wanted to be free to fuck other men and help her out. Think about all these single or divorced women. the ones that are married, miss that single life. Their girlfriends telling them about all those sexy guys they fuck. But around 3 am when he has gone home, and she isn't feeling good, it's at that moment that she wishes she had a husband like yours. While you want to be single she wants your life.

Lovely story...Loved the twist in the end. Grammar, word selection were a bit on the weak side, but overall, an excellent story. There's aren't many stories with twist-endings on literotica, which happens to be one of my favorite types, so congrats on achieving that feat :-) Hope to see more from you. C'iao!

Joyce has lost touch - surprise -

Wanda is a sociopath - surprise -

The kids disappoint me - childish loyalty is not normally that fickle.

Elise is a prize - granted -

Greg is a bit one dimensional - like many -

So - nicely done, a bit transparent but well enough paced to get me to the end with a smile on my face -

Thank you very much -

The POV comes nowhere near what I'd expect of even the coarsest female writer. Sloppy writing/grammar drags it down.

Liked the story, but the characters just missed. Joyce could not hold my sympathy throughout...she almost had me, but alas her weaknesses/flaws were not enough over the top to hold my attention, nor sympathetic enough to tug my heartstrings. Almost loved it, but nonetheless, still enjoyed your efforts. Thank you!

I'm normally a fan, but this one really stretched the imagination! Nothing in the story was realistic. I'm still waiting for your next one.

Basically, I liked this story. I suppose there has to be a wife out there who is this stupid. I don't agree with your harshest critics. These guys should lighten up. The story was interesting and held my interest. I wish Wanda had her jaw broken and a couple of legs as retribution for her evil. 5 stars

What loving spouse allows their soulmate to be drugged by a so-called friend? Why would you leave your family for any non-life threatening reason? Why woiuld you trust anyone else with your life? Up until the dinner party Joyce was like any other disenchanted housewife but when your husband throw you out of his life, beat up two guys to protect you and agree to a separation so you can get your head on straight and you proceed to make the situation worse that is not love. What Joyce loved was Joyce being married to Greg and what was good for her. Now she is a mentally unstable stalker? A good end to a selfish woman. SleeplessinMD

Good writing, as usual, but I didn't care for the plot. Probably because it hit too close to home. There are a lot of Wandas out there and they have made an art out of manipulating others for their own gain. Any person who is compassionate, generous, helpful to others or a little insecure is a prime victim for these unscrupulous people. A conniving Wanda saw Joyce's weaknesses and insecurities and used them to manipulate her into thinking that she was her friend and that she knew exactly what Joyce needed to have a more fulfilling life. Insecurity is a side effect of punishment. You can't help if you are insecure. It was how you were raised. Unfortunately, Joyce had to pay the consequences. So, I really didn't care for the story on moral grounds. People that don't know anything about behavior would say that Joyce wasn't innocent. Yes, she wasn't innocent of doing those things but the only thing she is guilty of is being naive and too trusting which tends to happen to people that grow up in small towns and then move to large cities where there are more people that prey off of unsuspecting others.

A good ending to the story would have been: When Wanda confessed to Joyce and gloated how she had manipulated her into ruining her own life. Joyce, realizing that now she really didn't have anything to live for went and got her gun which she stored since she went to college. The next day at work she confronted Wanda saying, "You really have to be careful when you take everything away from someone." Wanda--"Why is that, sugar?" "Because then they have nothing to lose." As Joyce pulls her 40 cal. Glock out of her purse and puts three in Wanda, center mass. She always liked the way the Glock fit in her small hand but still had the knockdown power of larger guns. Especially, when the person grows up in a small town in northern Michigan where their Daddy taught them how to shoot and the best way to dispose of varmits. "Joyce", he said, "No matter how vicious the varmit is you never let them suffer." Wanda didn't.

Maybe not a happy ending but at least a little justice was served.

Liked the ending and all the subtile hints that she should have/could have seen early on... but didn't.

I've known three women named Wanda in my 60+ years of life, all three were like the one in this story. Devious.

I expected more from you.

.. . and a lot of dumbass thrown in, but the ending was screwed up enough to want to wait for it. You described the intimacy of a hug well, Stang; simple gestures do convey a lot. I think Burns said something about best laid plans gang aft aglee - I never did understand grandmother and her Scots mutterings after she passed 90, but I think gang aft aglee translates to somthing like shit happens.

Good story, questionable, but a fun read for the characters.

The wife is as dumb as a rock. Someone said that some people ARE stupid and that is certainly true but it's not interesting to read about them. <br><br>

A lot of people were pissed at Wanda but I thought she made a decent villain except that she was too obvious. What did she really do except facilitate what the dope wanted to do anyway? Yeah, she got her sister installed as the "nanny" but really didn't do anything to get them together. She did send the video to the husband. That the the overt nasty thing she did. But the wife is the one that fucked all those people. There wouldn't have been any videos if the wife hadn't fucked them. And doesn't hubby deserve to know what a slut she is? Wifey wanted to play Russian Roulette and Wanda supplied the gun and bullets. But wifey pulled the trigger. I agree with Wanda, hubby is far better off with his new wife. So Wanda wasn't really a friend, DUH! <br><br>

Four pages is far too long to read about someone being this dumb.

Nobody to root for. The husband and wife are more stupd than each other. So is the new wife. Wanda is a piece of shit, and you mixed up the names pretty badly.

I am disappointed.

x

I have always enjoyed your stories no matter what the subject. I found myself losing concentration and forcing myself back to the story a number of times. I can't tell you why. The subject was okay and the plot line acceptable. there was something missing.

it seems everyone thinks Wonda set it up. all she did is made the wife into what she wanted to be. all the choices made were her own. so Wonda let out a tape of the wife acting like she wanted to. she went to the husband and told him she did it all for him. I think i know some women that would think they could do that to there man. they think he loves them so much that after they become a cum dumpster there husbands will still take them back. and maybe you just thank Wonda for showing you what your wife was really like and for giving a wonderful person to replace her. never read any of your storys before but i will now.

Chuck

even enter the church he was getting married in after she had drugged him and tryed to seduce him. I am supriesed that he had anything at all to do with Wanda's sister after he fond out what she had done to him and his ex. If Joyce wanted some revenge all she had to do was go back into the church and when the minister ask "does anyone have a reason why this union should not take place" was stand up and tell everyone what Wanda had done. I bet that would have ended the wedding.

Bad story. Stupid pathetic wife. If she had actually killed Wanda it might have been redeemed, but this was just whiny shit. Sorry, I really look forward to your stuff but this one stank.

I'd say, probably not. She had to be one of the dumbest wives SS06 has ever written about. This certainly isn't my favorite story of his, but nevertheless it was a fun read if one takes it as a sort of comedic tragedy with extremely drawn characters and situations.

I LOVE Thursdays because they usually mean another SS06 story!!

I quit reading after the date night. IF Greg was prepared to divorce his wife because some guy copped a feel, then why did he beat up the two guys?

Also, he agreed to the terms of seperation and rather than trying to woo his wife, he treated her with contempt and walked out, making unfounded accusations about future activities. Who the Fuck Does That if they want to remain married? What should she have done to win him back? He freaked out and for what? If he was going to get a divorce no matter what, then why didn't he just do it and save everyone the grief?

There are alot more issues than just these; but they suffice for examples as to the inconsistency of the plot and direction of the characters. I won't be wasting anymore time reading any subsequent chapters.

I think I'm with Mandy01 on this one. The writing was your usual excellent prose, but I just hated where the story went and felt sorry for the person I should have contempt for.

Sadly, people like Wanda actually exist and I guess I felt the injustice of it all a little too strongly. This is actually a good thing I guess because your story still provoked a strong emotional reaction in me, just a negative one. That, and for the first time ever I saw where this was going very earlier on (1st half of first page) it was like watching a train wreck in slo-mo. I knew what was going to happen but couldn't do a thing about it.

Personally, I'd have prefered some revenge against Wanda too.

Thanks SS06 I look forward to your next masterpiece.

...I feel kinda bad for dissing this story like I did.

I do want to point out that you are a very talented author and I have really liked almost all of your skillfully-woven stories. Like I said, I really look forward to Thursday mornings because I know I'm going to get a new SS06 special to read. As this is the first time I've not really enjoyed one of your stories I can't, and won't, complain - especially at the price I paid for it!

Best Wishes you talented man - I hope to hear from you next Thursday.

Please don't take the negatives to heart.

I still gave this a 4 for your sheer imagination - still no plagiarism here.