All Comments on 'Taking Control Over My Boss'

this story sounds like it was a kid who wrote it.

Great story. Keep it going.

How many of us wouldn't love to take our arrogant boss bitches and do this to them.

worst story i ever read!

for whatever reason i feel you wrote this in one day, congratulated yourself and sent it in.

As authors we write about what we know.

Good but needs some edits

The base of the story is not new, and I appreciate you trying to make the idea your own. But it really comes across as a child that learns its ok to hit people as long as they cant prove you did it.

Mind Control offers so much opportunity to explore the motivations of a person without the added baggage of them lying or being able to stop you.

You use it like fucking someone is the way to show them how mean they were to you. It would have been far more effective to just command them not to lie and make them stand in front of the store proclaiming all the ways they abused you (and the rest of the staff).

You need a lot of work to develop subtlety and twist.

Keep writing, what you have written is raw and lacks nuance but your writing and that is to be applauded.

But the shit and piss fetish stuff is a massive turn off.

I used to be a total breast fan.

Added asses to the mix in my thirties.

Now its a partial return.

Love all parts and crave the desired attitude.

It is the brain that controls attraction now

Despite that eating shit etc

I just dont get aroused by that image.

Each to their own.

I'm glad you wrote it. .You have to start somewhere. It needs spell check.