All Comments on 'Teaching Our Daughter'

A very nice first story. Hope you will continue.

There's some basic errors in grammar, and word usage. Things like "..." isn't a pause that's where a coma (,) duty is and/or end the sentence. Next major error is use of "mum" for a female parent, sadly that isn't how the international reader understands the meaning of the word, to them its "remain quiet/silent, short name for a flower, or mummy for a dead body;" likely other such flaws can be found.

you need to fill out your profile so we know a little bit about the author. Not real names or places but (I ass-u-me) you are a female..so add it to your profile. You say that english is not your first language so what country are you from?

I mean would stephen king not tell us who he is?

So keep writing this story is going someplace, and I assume (?) it may be personal? or at least we hope so.'

The Eagle gives it two talons up " "

DAymn!!! That was HOT! I am hard a nails right now...thanks and please continue to write..

Most of the English speaking world is ex-British Empire, and current Commonwealth member, and they know pefectly well what 'Mum' means, which is the diminutive for "Mother", so shut your parochial little midwestern mouth and learn about the rest of the world outside Dogshit, Iowa, which is where I assume you come from, before you start carping about International useage, as you obviously have no idea. Go back to sleep now, Homer, soon you got to get up and fuck your mule so you can have kids just like you...

this was good, hell i didn't mind the small grammar errors

I just hope you keep writing its realy good . more of this story very soon pls yours leann mawh ps xxxx

write a story and see how good you do ???? you are so critical but such morons you cant write your own

Nice story. Great dialogue. Can't wait to get dad in on the action

Looking forward to a little mouth...

This needs at least a part 2 or make it a series...very hot.

This is a nice concept and worthy of additional chapters. I recommend linking up with one of the volunteer editors. The story was a little rocky in places; an editor will help smooth it out.

I had a boner the whole way through

Great start for your first story, hope to see more chapeters.

This story had me so wet all the way through. Soon to read part two...

Please continue writing. Your story idea is interesting and erotic, and your English is fine, certainly much better than my German. I look forward to reading more of your work. One suggestion would be to submit longer episodes (each of 2 or 3 lit pages in length). Thank you for making the effort to write.

I really enjoyed this story,your English is cool, don't worry about the criticism,you will always have my following. Wish my mum had been as interested in teaching me.

Great start. I love mother-daughter sex and this promises to be a cock jerker all the way through. Must go on to chap. two now.