All Comments on 'Temptation Ch. 01'

Can't wait for the next episode...

...apparently it's going to turn into another rape story.

Unfortunately there are enough of those sickies on Lit already

and checking your site every day for new stories, and this one looks like it'll be a treat!

Thank you!!

Y'know I didn't start with chapter 1 when reading your story. So reading it now, I realize this doesn' do it justice. This chapter is full of love-hate relationship clihes. I think you use the word arrogant and stalker to describe the cop about ten times. And the women kept referring to him as a "thing" or "specimen." Which is fine when you're making a point, that he's just eye candy to them, but it got a little redundant.