by GuyJD
Loved this. Enough detail to keep us hooked and good description of their bonding, the backstory and the sex. Only thing is that we didn't get a great description of Mary, and it would have been something had you write Mary as being pleasantly surprised he was white, as the little "jab" seemed a bit out of place after their long conversations by phone. However, none of that's worth offing a star, so I say 5.
I know you wrote this a long time ago, but this story had the potential to really take off for multiple chapters and that would have been great, I think. :)
hahahahaha!!! Don't any of you people have a dictionary?
An awesome short story that was well-written, set the scene well, and finished with good action sequences. Very much worth the read!