All Comments on 'The Business Partners'

You were worried for nothing. This was fantastic for a first story!

Please continue writing! :O)

One minor detail: For future reference, you might want to keep your paragraphs a certain length (maybe half the size of those featured in this piece) to prevent your stories from looking too cluttered. It's easier on the audience's eyes that way.

Short and sexy, the story could have been really erotic if written more smoothly. For a first story, it's very good, but we're did this talented author disappear to. Sadly we lose to many like this but I have it 5*