All Comments on 'The Chess Piece Ch. 03'

Well Cinder that was another good chapter that you wrote about Laysea and Jason. I like the background information you gave about her parents and how her father killed her mother. And the panic that Jason could cause her in the future. It was a very lovely chapter and also gave some good information about Jason and their future together.

You have a lot of natural talent as a writer but I recommend learning how to better structure your sentences and using commas. I like the story but it did move a little fast in the beginning!

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