The Commander Ch. 06

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"This promises to be a great party," I smiled. "Why don't we move it into the bedroom?"

I laid the girls down on their backs on the king sized bed with enough room between them for me to kneel down. Then, with one hand on each pussy, I started a double feature hand job – a new attempt for me. It took me a moment to get my rhythm right. I eventually discovered if I set my left hand out of phase with my right hand – so one is rubbing up Fiona's pussy while the other is rubbing down Jocelyn's pussy, and vice versa – I could use my shoulders in a washing machine spinning back-and-forth agitator motion to maximize the excitement I could deliver to both Fiona and Jocelyn. They arched their backs and tightened their thigh muscles to better expose their clitorises to my sensual massage. After five minutes of non-stop massaging, both my hands grew tired, but I didn't give up, and my persistence was rewarded as I heard the girls' breathing reduce to short, shallow gasps. As they approached climax together, Fiona and Jocelyn held hands and closed their eyes. When one girl's gasps grew into moans, the other's moans grew louder into groans, and then the first groans expanded into cries, and so on, as the two girls audibly fed off each other's excitement in a runaway audible feedback loop that climaxed in both girls screaming together. They arched their backs higher as I watched both bodies exploded in orgasmic seizures. I dug my weary fingers harder into their pussies, further intensifying their eruptions.

When at last the girls' orgasms faded out, we all slipped under the bed covers, and formed a spoon sandwich on our left sides with me in the middle. I felt Jocelyn's soft breasts against my back, and I wrapped my right arm around Fiona, pulling her back tight into my chest. With the rollercoaster emotional day now behind us, I drifted off into a blissful post-coital sleep for about fifteen minutes. When I awoke, I motionlessly listened to the two girls' soft breathing.

About twenty minutes later, Fiona stirred, turned her head back to look at me. I lifted my head over hers so we faced each other, and then we kissed passionately for a very long time.

"Get a room!" Jocelyn announced she was awake, and we all broke out laughing.

When her laughter subsided, Fiona slipped southward under the covers and locked on to Mister Happy with her lovely mouth for another go. But Mister Happy wasn't. And suddenly it hit me. Don was dead. I was no longer in a jump. My multiple orgasm days were over.

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wyoboy67wyoboy67about 8 years ago
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Thanks for such great stories!!!!!

Love the deception and lack of real and trusting relationships...

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago

Great plot twist this chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Sequels

Good progressing story line.

Eventually Fiona has to be told about Don Molloy taking over Jet's body, possibly at Don Molloy's funeral.

Also you need to have Don/Jet test whether or not Jet's soul is also dead, maybe with him temporarily taking control of Jocelyn, with Fiona having the cattle prod and tying up Jet as a just in case measure, making Fiona a participant in her and Jocelyn's salvation should help Fiona get past her feelings.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Progressing nicely, I see.

I just hope you won't make Jet lose his sexual potency, the way you've hinted in that last paragraph, though. That would be the killer in an erotic story...

Other than that, I like your style! Your writing style is clear, easy to follow, and I'm noticing that it has improved since you started out. You're doing just fine, so keep at it. New Jet's character is awesome, as well! He is actually kind and generous, but is also a very capable man, especially when it comes to business and dangerous situations. I like what you made him into, and I'd be willing to bet many other people like that, as well. And he's still only human - as seen from his disconcert when he heard of "his own" death. Pretty nice touch!

The story is developing nicely, too. I wonder if you'll grow on this story into something long and adventurous, like having him go forth boldly into this new life and make him use his mind powers and money to improve on both his life and the lives of those new people that would be close to him? Adding a few side characters would add dimension to the story. Besides, it seems to me that all the money he now owns could be put into something useful and exciting - something much smarter than Old Jet ever could do.

And by the way, do you think that could develop a bit more on that aspect of the story that concerns his mind powers? So far, other than body-snatching, it seemed like his powers were a form of high-powered hypnosis, but I don't see why there wouldn't be a reason for Jet to start discovering something new about his mind powers that he wasn't aware of before. Something that appears small and insignificant, but is actually an immense asset would be the best thing - like sensing what another person is thinking in that very moment, like body language only slightly more substantial... it cannot give him much of an advantage, but it would force him to use his smarts even more, especially if you want to put him up against those elements who threaten Jocelyn, that are capable of making people disappear. Such people must have wide networks and legit businesses... you never know what might happen...

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
very nice turn!

This part of the story brings a very nice turn that keeps it interesting and exiting!

Please go on soon.

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