All Comments on 'The Cook's Revenge Ch. 01'

Characters seem to have no motivation. The payoff is dreadful.

There seems to be no rythm or reason for the main character's hatred of stuck up bitches, more background on his reasons would help

Proofread - proofread - have another proofread as spellcheck won't ketch wrong turds that are spelled write.

As others have said setting / background are the foundation for a good entertaining story - take your time - do it write ah right.

Onward and upward - it will get better - write? - regards

characters = unbelievable