All Comments on 'The Doctor is In Ch. 06'

NurseSally, I applaud you. This chapter made a major leap in your story. The tension surrounding Ted's spanking was superb and I love your commentary and bantering scattered throughout the chapter. My favorite part was at the end, where Sally spread her legs to let her brother see and smell her wet panties. This story is almost perfect for me and I hope you'll keep writing.

Nurse Sally,

Your storytelling and pacing is a natural gift. The last scene

was the hottest one I've read. You are out of my league as a writer. Truly great work.

Jay

Nurse Sally,

Your storytelling and pacing is a natural gift. The last scene

was the hottest one I've read. You are out of my league as a writer. Truly great work.

Jay

nicely! You certainly can build tension. When Sara examines him I thiught I'd bust a nut. Can't wait for Shannon's exam.

This story involves an unusual mixture of punishment and reward.

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The presence of a third person (Sara) in this chapter adds to Ted’s embarrassment as he is exposed to female gaze once more. Sara increases his embarrassment by stripping him and examining him, even spreading his nether cheeks.

Sara gets her jollies in fondling Ted’s shaft under the pretense of checking him out for pre-existing injuries. Sally enjoys watching Sara play with Ted’s cock.<br />

<i>When he did, Sara looked up at me and mouthed the words, "Nice cock" and smiled a huge grin at me, knowing full well Ted couldn't see what she was doing. Then, giving me the 'thumbs up' sign, she looked down at Ted's butt. </i>

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Sally takes advantage of two more opportunities to get her hands on Ted’s bag of family jewels. The following scene in which Sally literally has Ted by the balls is symbolic:<br />

<i>Holding the paddle so my brother wouldn't see it if he looked back at us, Sara motioned me over to the right side of Ted's body and told me to reach down and circle my fingers around the very top of his scrotum. "If he moves," she whispered over to me, "you pull. Got it?" </i>

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Sally oscillates between being dominant and being submissive. Sally reveals a submissive streak when she concedes:<br />

<i>I'd gladly let him take the choice away from me — he could bend me over the bed, rip my shorts off, pull my panties down and I'd gladly spread my legs and open myself up for him.</i>

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By taking part in overtly sexual activities with Ted, she may lose control over him shortly. After all, the older brother is typically dominant relative to the younger sister. I would have preferred that she exercise self-control until the last chapter of the story. Besides, delay of gratification contributes to narrative tension.

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While I would have enjoyed more detail, the following passage was a highlight:

<i>His eyes never left my panties, and I proudly stood on display in front of him for several minutes, just letting him look at me. Finally, I shuffled my feet apart and traced my fingers over my panty encased pussy and he stared at me in disbelief and wonder. He came a step closer and watched intently, and as the minutes clicked by, I put on a show for him, displaying myself lewdly and rubbing my pussy over my panties while I watched him fist his incredible cock.</i>

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Surprisingly, Ted doesn't take Sally up on her offer to remove her panties. Alas, although showing some sexy cameltoe, Sally never does show Ted her pink flesh; but she does come close.<br />

<i>My right hand fell between my legs, and I traced up and down between my labia while he watched. My panties, already drenched, were stuck to my skin and as I drug my fingers up and down my lips, they stayed inside the folds of my labia and I could feel and hear Ted's excitement as he watched me touch myself. I felt amazingly sexy and happy with myself for letting him look at me being so nasty.

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Slowly, I reached forward and put my hands around his neck and pulled his face right into me, moving his head until I felt his nose directly adjacent to my vaginal opening. On his own, he began to move his head up and down, rubbing his nose between my lips — up over my clitoris and way down to my vagina. Oh, it felt so nice to finally feel the touch of someone else between my legs…. it had been so long.... so very long and I shuddered each time his nose brushed by clit. </i>

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I would have had Sally thrust her mound of Venus forward, part her labes in front of the panty-sniffer, and pull his head into her swollen, glistening opening. After a few minutes of thrust and withdraw, she could have forced his head back until he was on his back, at which time she could have mounted his face. If she pulled her labia up as well as out, she could expose her clit to pleasing friction.

She might have left a snail trail from his forehead to his chin. She could have commanded him to tongue the rim of her pussy hole in a swirling manner. She might even have dipped a finger in her own pie and rubbed his nostrils with her nectar, leaving him with a potent, lingering scent of aroused womanhood — eau de pussy. If she climaxed, her convulsing cooze would send even more of her nectar down into his mouth. That would have been fitting, I think.

Hands cuffed behind him ...

Hands cuffed to thighs while teased ...

Hands cuffed to ankles ...

Tied to table, hands together stretched in front, ankles tied to table legs ...

And, of course, gagged with her wet panties after he takes them off with his teeth

Excellent scenes of spanking and lust.....

Premise OK

Scenario not.

All the preparation for the spanking and then the spanking itself did nothing for me.

Three stars. Being generous.