All Comments on 'The Essence of Helena'

The story idea is fine, but the execution is off. You sometimes spend more time writing what they are wearing than the sex itself. When it comes to that, the description is sorely lacking. I expect this is from lack of actual real world BDSM knowledge of what it is like to wear clamps or be whipped etc. Certainly you could give horrible ideas to people that read this and think you can wear nipple clamps like you have the girl doing here. Cut off blood flow like that for hours and you'll have permanent nerve and tissue damage.