All Comments on 'The Fallen One Ch. 4'

Felt everything since chapter 1 was a letdown...I mean vampire fallen angels? And no action? And vampires are pretty lame, compared to demons...

This story has a good basis but it needs work. While I admire the creativity of the name, it's just really really awkward. Maybe you could find a name that means the same thing. The grammar isn't bad but the spelling needs work. You need to explain the other world a little more. It's a bit random. Is it on earth or another spiritual Realm? If it's another realm, how are vampires there? Not bad writing otherwise. And vampires are really cool when they don't sparkle :)

Maybe one day you might continue this story, but it's unlikely given this was posted 16 years ago. I wish the author luck anyways. Thank you for the interesting perspective.