All Comments on 'The Family Dinner Party'

...correct your myriad of errors!!!!

Example 1 - ".. 5 coarse meal .." - I hope not!! It would have been inedible!!

Possibly "5 course meal .." might have been better!!

Example 2 - “Robert had apparently had enough though, he reached on massive hand behind my head and guided me in.”?? ‘on massive hand’?? Should that be ‘one’??

Example 3 - “..."Fuck," I yelled not carrying if anyone could hear.” - ‘carrying’?? Should that be ‘caring’?

Example 4 - “I wrapped my tongue around it swirling it every witch way.” - Your name Hermione? I think you meant “which”!!

Example 5 - ""How does it compare to my sons," - how many sons has he got??

Or did you mean 'son's'? As in 'the cock belonging to my son'?

After that I lost the will to live!!

'Favorited'? NO WAY!! 2* tops!!

this was great but it needs an editor or at least a proof reader

I really enjoyed your story! I hope you are planning on continuing the story!

Disgusting...

-jaye-